People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your opinion.
I’m the person who wears different clothes in different situations. I’ve found out that my clothes tend to affect my behavior in different ways. I’m going to explain how clothes influence the behavior of people.
At first I want to cite some facts about design concept of the clothes and the way they influence people behavior. Everyone choose his/her clothes based on his/her favorites and personality. It’s why men and women choose completely different clothes. On the other hand the clothes affect the feelings and behavior of the person. For example a soft and neaty clothes make someone feels relax while a harsh and untidy clothes make someone going mad. I also have experienced that when I wear loose clothes I feel relax, since when I wear suit I feel like confident and decesive. This way that clothes affect the people are closely related to the designing concept of the clothes, for instance the suit is designed for formal meetings, so when someone wear suit feels like confident.
Although the design concept of the clothes, affect the people mentally, the color of the clothes is another important factor that can influence the person. It’s obvious that every color have an influence on people mind. For instance the white color give a sense of relaxing to people; the green color invite people to feel healthy and strong. This is why the gangs usually wear clothes with black color; the black make them feel like unlawfully and harshly. Because of the influence of color on the personality of people I usually try to wear bright clothes, and I really experienced that it works.
I have experienced different clothes at different situations, and I think that clothes can affect the people in two different ways which consist of the design concept and the color. So in conclusion I can say that these reasons have let me to be agree the statement that tells “the clothes affect the people behavior”.
Sentence: For example a soft and neaty clothes make someone feels relax while a harsh and untidy clothes make someone going mad.
Description: A verb, present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to feels and relax
Sentence: This way that clothes affect the people are closely related to the designing concept of the clothes, for instance the suit is designed for formal meetings, so when someone wear suit feels like confident.
Description: The fragment someone wear suit is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace wear with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: For instance the white color give a sense of relaxing to people; the green color invite people to feel healthy and strong.
Description: The fragment color give a is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace give with verb, past tense
Description: The fragment color invite people is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace invite with verb, past tense
Sentence: This is why the gangs usually wear clothes with black color; the black make them feel like unlawfully and harshly.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to black and make
Sentence: For example a soft and neaty clothes make someone feels relax while a harsh and untidy clothes make someone going mad.
Error: neaty Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: I also have experienced that when I wear loose clothes I feel relax, since when I wear suit I feel like confident and decesive.
Error: decesive Suggestion: decisive
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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