Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
At first glance, it seems very difficult for us to draw a definite conclusion that giving high salaries to athletes and entertainers are wrong. Because it may have both advantages and disadvantages. However after serious considerations we can see that under most circumstances , such high salaries given to them is inequable. My arguments for this attiude is listed below.
One of the primary reasons of this inequality, indisputable fact that the education is one of the most important key factors of development of a country, Since the average salary of a teacher is around 30000$ per year. Soc...
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Sentence: All in all, I admit that they entertainers and athletes are gifted, and I don't underestimate their abilities to enjoy big crowds but the entertainment shouldn't be the most important factor in someone's life.
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Sentence: However after serious considerations we can see that under most circumstances , such high salaries given to them is inequable.
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Sentence: My arguments for this attiude is listed below.
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Sentence: High ammounts of money seduces them to try their luck on these areas and they ignore their education maybe other talents that they might have.
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Sentence: As we know, very low percentage of these youngsters being successful and the rest of them fails and has nothing valuable on their hands but the failure attempts on these areas.This results a huge disappointment on youngster and increasement on the unemployment.
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Sentence: As far as I know in spain, Soccer players pay 40 percent of their income as taxes which equals high ammounts of money.
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Sentence: This may be implemented in many countries, Other than that Government can make laws that athlethes and entertainers may fund the social organizations which will decrese government's responsibilities.
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