In some organizations, promotions are based on seniority, while in other organization, promotions are based on performance. Discuss the advantages of each position. Then indicate which position you think is best and why?

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In some organizations, promotions are based on seniority, while in other organization, promotions are based on performance. Discuss the advantages of each position. Then indicate which position you think is best and why?

No one can ever deny the significance of promotion in workplace as one of the most important aspect to improve an organization; however, how to promote people is play an unavoidable role in that situation. Therefore, promotion in an organization has many advantages, but it is very important how to promote and encourage employee.

On the one hand, employers prefer to encourage their employees based on their seniority. In this position, people try to work honestly for their work system because they know that they can improve their position after few years. Furthermore, they try to work normally because they know that they can be successful after constant year, even they do not work hardly. They never try to use their ability completely, and in my point of view, it has harmful effects and causes bad problems to organization or company.

On the other hand, some organizations promote their people based on their performance. In those companies, people, especially newcomers, try to work hardly because they expect that their boss improve their situation if they work hardly, if they help company, and if they can be a useful person for their company. Not only do newcomer try to work hardly, but all people in that company must also work hardly for a better performance. I strongly believe that this kind of promotions has many advantages to promote the rank of company or organization between others. Finally, people try to improve their ability, knowledge, and skills, and consequently, their boss promotes their position based on their performance.

All in all, I hold the view that appropriate way to promote people in one company plays an important role in the position of that company. In spite the fact that old workers in one organization must be promoted, I believe that it has many advantages if promotions are based on performance.

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Sentence: No one can ever deny the significance of promotion in workplace as one of the most important aspect to improve an organization; however, how to promote people is play an unavoidable role in that situation.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and play

Sentence: Not only do newcomer try to work hardly, but all people in that company must also work hardly for a better performance.
Description: The fragment newcomer try to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace newcomer with newcomers

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