TOEFL integrated writing: Dutch painter Rembrandt

The article states that there were doubts if Rembrandt the famous Dutch painted the portrait of elderly woman, because it's wasn't express his talent in painting, and provides three reasons that support these doubts. However the professor explain that all the examination that done by expert confirm that this portrait was indeed work by Rembrandt.

First, the reading claims about the way of dressed woman in the portrait especially cap and fur collar, which was not match Rembrandt style in painting, because he was very accurate and aware to every details in his drawing.The professor refutes this point by saying the checking of the portrait by x- ray showed that someone painted over the original color,to increase the value of it.

Second, the article posits that there is a problem in the face of the woman, it was illuminated due to her cloth. However, the professor says that in the original painting the women was wearing a simple cloth of light color that reflects light that eliminates the woman partial face, that justified why her face was in partial shadow.

Third, the reading says that the portrait painted in more than one piece of wood which are adhere together. The professor opposes this point by explaining that the person who added the color over the original one, was also enlarged the size of the portrait from boundary by glue the additional wood piece with the original one to make it grand and variable.

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Sentence: The article states that there were doubts if Rembrandt the famous Dutch painted the portrait of elderly woman, because it's wasn't express his talent in painting, and provides three reasons that support these doubts.
Suggestion: The article states that there were doubts if Rembrandt, the famous Dutch, painted the portrait of elderly woman, because it's wasn't expressed his talent in painting, and provides three reasons that support these doubts.

Sentence: However the professor explain that all the examination that done by expert confirm that this portrait was indeed work by Rembrandt.
Description: The fragment professor explain that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace explain with verb, past tense

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Score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 246 250
No. of Characters: 1164 1200
No. of Different Words: 127 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.96 4.3
Average Word Length: 4.732 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.235 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.013 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.461 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.781 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.201 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4