TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The parents of infants and toddlers should know about the disadvantages of watching television for their children. In my opinion, before the couples decide to have child they should get knowledge about everything’s of growing their children on healthy way to not heart them.

First, I’m as a Pediatrician want to discuss about the bad points of watching television for young children, when the parents come to my clinical to get information, they are often shocked when I tell them that it's a bad idea for children to watch TV or use mobile apps before age 18 months, because most toddlers already have. Surveys tell us that 90% of 1-year-olds have already used a mobile device, some starting as young as age 4 months. For example, my previous referrer said, "But my baby likes it!" Infants may stare at the bright colors and motion on a screen, but their brains are incapable of making sense or meaning out of all those bizarre pictures. What infants and toddlers need most to learn is interaction with the people around them. That doesn't mean that they shouldn't video-chat with a distant grandparent or a deployed parent, but when it comes to day-to-day learning they need to touch things, shake them, throw them, and most of all to see the faces and hear the voices of those they love the most. Apps can teach toddlers to tap and swipe at a screen, but studies tell us that these skills don't translate into real-world learning. t screen viewing before age 18 months has lasting negative effects on children's language development, reading skills, and short term memory. It also contributes to problems with sleep and attention.

Second, Specifically, children are programmed to learn from interacting with other people. The dance of facial expressions, tone of voice, and body language between a toddler and parent is not only beautiful, it's so complex that researchers have to record these interactions on video and slow them down just to see everything that's going on. Toddlers are also learning to pay attention for prolonged periods, and toddlers who watch more TV are more likely to have problems paying attention at age 7. Video programming is constantly changing, constantly interesting, and almost never forces a child to deal with anything more tedious than an infomercial.

Third, after age 2 things change, at least somewhat. During the preschool years some children do learn some skills from educational TV. Well-designed shows can teach kids literacy, math, science, problem-solving, and prosocial behavior. Naturally, children learn more when they watch TV or use apps with a parent. Content matters, a lot. All programs educate kids about something, but stick with ones that are designed to teach children stuff they should actually know like language and math.

In conclusion, Remember, TV is still TV whether you actually watch it on a TV screen or on a mobile phone or computer. I hope that the explains given above have sufficiently expressed my opinion

Votes
Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...are often shocked when I tell them that its a bad idea for children to watch TV or ...
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
... need most to learn is interaction with the people around them. That doesnt mean that they shouldnt vi...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...ction with the people around them. That doesnt mean that they shouldnt video-chat with...
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Suggestion: shouldn't
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: that's
...d slow them down just to see everything thats going on. Toddlers are also learning to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, so, still, third, well, at least, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2513.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06653225806 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76299946987 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558467741935 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.7440950983 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.227272727 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5454545455 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100106877576 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336498213647 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0261092651683 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0578499904754 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262056893253 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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