TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

Use of Internet has been a debatable issue for many years. Different people possess different reasons for their choice between Internet providing people with a lot of valuable information or accessing too much information causes problem. Personally, I strongly agree with the former.
First and foremost, what I put in my priority is work efficiency. The fact is that Internet offers a large number of useful information. Therefore, there is always a variety of subjects that are available on Internet. People are able to go on the web and look for information that they need. As a result, it effectively helps them to finish their work quicker. More importantly, the information that the Internet provides us often comes from reliable sources. These information is often censored and monitored by the web editor. People can be more assured of the trustworthy of the information by reading the viewers’ comments. Accordingly, it goes without saying that people are bound to get a better understanding of their work and provide better outcome by getting access to these valid information. Without doubt, being offered with valuable information is a major factor contributing to people’s work efficiency.
In the second place, skills development is undoubtedly of paramount importance. It is widely known that having the ability to access to huge source of information, people are likely to be confused. A lot of information is often about the same topic and it’s hard for them to select. Therefore, they are certain to consider carefully and decide which information they will use. As the result, it substantially improves their critical thinking skill. More notably, when confronting with a lot of information on the Internet, people are spend much of their time on the Web. This information often leads to other information which will attract and waste our time for other activities. Accordingly, people have to schedule their time effectively to balance the time for surfing the web and pursuing personal hobbies. It is certain that their time-management skill will be improved significantly. With no doubt, accessing to valuable information plays an important role in skills development.
On the other hand, some people might say that gaining the access to a lot of valuable information will dramatically diminish the creativity of people. Therefore it will be extremely hard for people to work in a group and worsen their team-work skill. However, this opinion is not always true. In fact, Internet only plays a minor role in these situations. People are the one who have to use their creativity to come up with the main idea and they only consult the information on the Internet. Furthermore, people have to share the idea with other members. They are more likely to convey their idea and contribute to the group. Accordingly, it is easier for all the members in the group to reach an agreement on the subject and provide better outcome. Beyond any doubt, the idea that accessing to much information on the Internet will harm people’s team-work skill is often possible to end in collapse.
To sum up, work efficiency, skills development, ability to contribute to the group are the convincing reasons for my choice. It is highly recommended that readers should take my writing into close consideration.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...iency. The fact is that Internet offers a large number of useful information. Therefore, there is...
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Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'These informations'?
Suggestion: This information; These informations
...s us often comes from reliable sources. These information is often censored and monitored by the ...
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Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ally diminish the creativity of people. Therefore it will be extremely hard for people to...
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Line 5, column 794, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...yond any doubt, the idea that accessing to much information on the Internet will h...
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Line 6, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ke my writing into close consideration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, in fact, no doubt, as a result, to sum up, in the second place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.0752688172 334% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2800.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19480519481 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99483298606 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456400742115 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.9 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6098496891 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3529411765 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8529411765 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73529411765 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303081264781 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799600591197 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715942226338 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189576359724 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088672045872 0.0645574589148 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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