Some people argue that high sales of some popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising not the real need of consumer. Do you agree or disagree?
In the modern era, social media such as television and internet have important role in daily life people. One of the significant part of media is commercial. Some critic believes that publicity effect to purchaser for buying new merchandise without require them. From where I stand, this proposal shows power of advertising for sale goods and influence on buyers.
To begin with, most company for sale their article, using power of advertising. Compare to the previous decade we have more advertising everywhere such as on television shows, internet, newspaper, billboards and many other similar items and container. Some companies being use special ads for selling their product. Hence, now that improving power of advertisement, use prominent people in ads and effort to shows the fact that these items are used by celebrities. In addition to, in each social media are shown advertise with famous person so that this item become popular and earned a great income to the company. However, sometimes advertiser don’t show real and general aspect of goods, which they are show in commercial, owing to using well ¬– known person, citizenship appetence to punches this item. Thus, businesses attain high sale of goods inasmuch as their items have high quality but for use commercial that show renowned person.
Secondly, with excessive of commercial some people tend to shopping new materials which have the same as this things in order to it appear ability of advertising. Since people who stay at home spend most time on the television, they attend to deal modern product. After watching several times, advertise make sense to looker on needs these good so that viewer provoke to buy it. For the sake of providing several things, most society convert to materialist. For example, one of my classmate always watch commercial from internet and television. Consequently, watching these advertisements creates great interest in certain goods hence she tends to consume them; therefore, she always waste money for buy things that she has the same as these goods.
Based on what was discussed, I think that is true power of advertising make people buy new things. Commercial not only pursued people to buy fresh goods but also make materialist in society. Also, advertisement can improve efficiency of company.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 373.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20375335121 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68465429823 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592493297587 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7011441498 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.05 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.65 5.21951772744 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208019443047 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622250470338 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470938467874 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130983746303 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220836376935 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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