TPO 54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weigh the pros and cons before jumping to conclusion. Some people believe that athletics who are already state-sponsored Olympic teams do not require a large amount of money than arts do. However, in my humble opinion, government should sponsor athletics for several reasons.
The first exquisite reason that makes me hold this belief is sport demands a lot of expensive equipment in order to exercise. We know that gym has various of new technological equipment which is fairly high-priced. For instance, my brother who brought golden medal from participation said that their team worked really harsh condition such as old gear and cold room and he wished they had a fund.
Secondly, another reason deserving some words here is athletics can raise the country's reputation high. Therefore, government must pay their effort and support them without any shadows of doubt.To illustrate more thoroughly, once our national sport team win the prestigious competition, Mongolia started to has begun to be known for foreigners so that our country paid them very well.
Finally yet just as important, if administration stand up for athletics can encourage people whose purpose is becoming sportsman. In other words, a bunch of people who give up their career of sports dependent on money. They afraid that unless achieve success and can not afford their daily meals. However, people will pursue their dream If ministry supports them
In conclusion, contemplating aforementioned paragraphs sport require a lot of support in order to accomplish their objective. Therefore administration should give a fund for athletics than arts.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 271.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28413284133 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87207687709 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.675276752768 0.524837075471 129% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6631278626 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.153846154 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174420199305 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583677313304 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713959742462 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962235841124 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709035163018 0.0645574589148 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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