A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to report that they "frequently" had trouble concentrating. Of adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online, 20 percent also reported that they had felt "sad, down or blue" at least three times within the past month. These results suggest that spending too much time online is linked to depression and people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument claim that adult ranges between 30-45 spend more than 30 hour surfing online suffer from depression and feel melancholy. Stated in this way the argument failed to mention the several key reason, on which argument plausible be evaluated better.
Firstly, author failed mention the validity of the survey, whether the survey has been done by the renown company or not. while doing survey the population we take matter a lot. The more rife the population is the precise the ramification will be. The author fails to mention the genre of population as well. author just mentioned the 250 adults, we don't know whether its esoteric or rife. Changes are all the 250 adults are from Sports background, who don't like to sit on laptop for a long time.
Secondly, auther mentioned person who are spending more then 30 hours have a frequent trouble in concentration, frequent here is not the convincing. In order to support the argument author must be lucid and laconic while expressing his views. moreover, author doesn't mention the number people who spend the more than 30 hours online, So difficult to come to the conclusion that 20% who face problem is a high number. May be the chance are that only 10 persons sit more than 30 hours weekly, in this case, there will be only 2 person who feel sad, down and blue more. which is not a big number.To come we conclusion we need to have the proper analytical data, and adequate research is need.
At the last, Actual reason of the depression of the adult we don't know, Possibility is that the adult are suffering from lack of sleep or lack of calmness. In this the case of calm, the better solution is to do the meditation. Even we don't the other reason of the adults, In the week we have 24*7*7 hours, but only 30 hours are known in which adults are online what about the rest of the time. To make a precise discern we have to look into the proper schedule of each and every adult. moreover, we have to look into the diet aspect as well, whether th diet is full of protein and nutrition or not.
Due to the above mentioned reason the argument is unconvincing, we need the proper analysis before comin to the conclusion, till this open to moot.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 1751 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.345 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.31 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.785 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.185 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...argument plausible be evaluated better. Firstly, author failed mention the valid...
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...been done by the renown company or not. while doing survey the population we take mat...
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...uthor just mentioned the 250 adults, we dont know whether its esoteric or rife. Chan...
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... adults are from Sports background, who dont like to sit on laptop for a long time. ...
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...g time. Secondly, auther mentioned person who are spending more then 30 hou...
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...kly, in this case, there will be only 2 person who feel sad, down and blue more. which...
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...erson who feel sad, down and blue more. which is not a big number.To come we conclusi...
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...nd blue more. which is not a big number.To come we conclusion we need to have the ...
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...eason of the depression of the adult we dont know, Possibility is that the adult are...
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...lution is to do the meditation. Even we dont the other reason of the adults, In the ...
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...roper schedule of each and every adult. moreover, we have to look into the diet aspect a...
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...s full of protein and nutrition or not. Due to the above mentioned reason the ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60759493671 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3759787027 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506329113924 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9036877249 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7894736842 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223116838874 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666126766258 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779660783616 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115794876653 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672086382937 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.3550499002 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 12.5979740519 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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