Family is one of the most important societies that a person lives in and it prepares us for participating in the bigger societies. While some people believe that the influence of the aunts and uncles on our lives in the same as before, I strongly believe that it is becoming less significant. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, financial problems are pushing people further from each other. While people in the past could have simple lives with lower working hours, nowadays, people have to work harder in order to overcome economic difficulties. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About 15 years ago, I and all my family members gathered at my grandmother’s house at the weekends. But as the economic situation became more complicated, my parents didn’t have much time to visit their parents because they were supposed to work more hours per day. As a result, they were so exhausted at the end of the week so that they preferred to stay at home and get some rest.
Secondly, the traditions and perspectives of people about life have changed. In the past, having close relationships with relatives was considered a good way of living. However, nowadays, people think more about their individual lives and try to spend more time with their spouses and kids rather than their cousins and aunts. For example, In a small city like Neyshabour, people still have a traditional view and spend a lot of time with their extended families. Also, they try to teach this lifestyle to the next generation. I can remember the time which my aunts came to our house and wanted to leave at the end of the night, I became so sad that I cried and asked them not to; although I knew we were going to see each other soon. On the other hand, In a big city like Tehran, I know that some of my friends see their uncles just once a year and they seem not to have any problems with that.
In conclusion, I believe extended families are becoming less important. This is because people are becoming more busy with their occupations and also traditional views about family are altering.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70291777188 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63414056881 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522546419098 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3217933352 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0909576439098 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0325366152824 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427633159771 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684290988439 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326000776911 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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