TPO-53 - Integrated Writing Task

The article discusses how imposing tax on unhealthy foods or cigarettes can benefit the society and provides three reason of support for it. The professor, however, refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the article states that taxing those who use cigarettes or consume unhealthy food can make the reluctant toward doing so, since the final price of these products risens. The professor on the other hand opposes this idea, stating that employing such attitudes toward unhealthy foods or cigarettes doesnt necessarily lead to healthier behaviors. A smoker for instance will tend to buy a cheaper cigarette, one that he can afford, and as a result can e hared substantially since these cigarettes come along with greater health risks. As for tax on unhealthy food, the professor believes that this action will leave the with less money to buy healthy food,

Secondly, the article states that taxes are fair since, those who consume unhealthy food or cigarettes create medical costs and these costs can be covered through the obtained taxes. The professor opposes this idea, explaining that this method doesnt take into account the income of people who are to be affected by it. for example a poor person and a rich one can both blow a way a pack of cigarettes per day. While the rich spends a small fraction of his income on the cigarettes, the poor will have to spend a bigger one to cover his expenses. therefore this law only creates a greater burdon on those who have lower incomes.

Thirdly, the article states that government can use the earned money fro taxes on unhealthy behaviors for public welfare. The professor refutes this point, saying that the income can be millions of dollars and Government can be reluctant to spend this massive amount of money on actions stated by the author. Professor states that the high amount of money , thats being earned be government through unhealthy behaviors of poeple is responsible for governments reluctance to take radical measurements against smoking cigarettes in public places, for example.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 304, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...es toward unhealthy foods or cigarettes doesnt necessarily lead to healthier behaviors...
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Line 2, column 552, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...with greater health risks. As for tax on unhealthy food, the professor believes t...
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Line 4, column 245, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... this idea, explaining that this method doesnt take into account the income of people ...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 548, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...end a bigger one to cover his expenses. therefore this law only creates a greater burdon ...
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Line 4, column 548, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: therefore,
...end a bigger one to cover his expenses. therefore this law only creates a greater burdon ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 70, Rule ID: FOR_FRO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for'?
Suggestion: for
...hat government can use the earned money fro taxes on unhealthy behaviors for public...
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Line 6, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he income can be millions of dollars and Government can be reluctant to spend thi...
^^
Line 6, column 357, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sor states that the high amount of money , thats being earned be government throug...
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Line 6, column 360, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... states that the high amount of money , thats being earned be government through unhe...
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Line 6, column 528, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... measurements against smoking cigarettes in public places, for example.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, while, as for, for example, for instance, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 340.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05294117647 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54287204969 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514705882353 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.5197698156 49.2860985944 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.153846154 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1538461538 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5384615385 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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