The most important things people learn are from their families?

Have you ever thought that lessons are getting harder after the school graduation? Have you ever considered that school was the easiest part of the life? If you are feeling that way, you agree with me. Personally, I definitely believe that human can not learn most significant lessons from school. I feel this way for 2 reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.

First and foremost, professional work life is the hardest part of life and people learn everything from there. Living in a society expects some skills and tasks from you and number one is earning money. Without money, you can't live your life in wealthy, but it is not easy to earn money in recent years. Competitions is getting higher and you need to adopt in this situations. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I have started to my fist engineering job after my graduation, I had so much confident. The reason of that I have graduated from university as a honor student. However, I haven't learned anything about professional life and I realized that very late. I had a lot of trouble with my chief because of my confident behaviors, because I have believed my self so much. After 1 year, I have changed and learned so many things from my manager.

Secondly, another time period that people can learn lots of things is marriage life. I strongly believe that living in a dormitory can not be compared with the living with your suppose. For instance, when I was in university I always had problems with my roommates but I could change my room when I had trouble so much. However, you can't change your home when you get married. You need to get along with the problems. Sometimes it is so hard because some topics are so controversial and you need to live with it most of your life. As a result, I have learned how to be patient rather than escaping from struggles.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people can learn more in adults life than school. This is because professional life and marriage life are the most hardest ones and people have learned much in this time period of their lives.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6170212766 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5740504321 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473404255319 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.4027263959 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.3333333333 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95833333333 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177528313736 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058272114247 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745145864055 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12638908983 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502814341017 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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