The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
A nation is home to many great artists, rulers and scientists and their success in a way helps their nation gain prominence as a virtue of their success. Therefore, it seems apt to conclude that if a scientist is making significant contributions to the domain he belongs, or the artists of a country are making beautiful portraits, the citizens are also having a positive lifestyle, but is that so? The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not be the achievements of its rulers, scientists or artists, but by the general welfare of its people. I agree with this statement and I will explain the reasoning behind my position in the paragraphs below.
A scientist might achieve great prominence by inventing a device that is a source of energy for an very long period of time. He does so in order to provide relief to the citizens of his nation who do not have access to continuous electric supply. If his project is a success, it will not only make a name for himself but also for the country he belongs to, but in order to implement his project he needs to have technologies that are not present in his country and therefore, migrate to a developed country. Eventually, he constructs the device, but it is too expensive to be implemented in the country that he belongs to. Developed countries might implement his technology and also benefit from it, but his own country will not be able to reap the rewards of his innovation. The scientist will be famous and will also make a name for his country but the citizens of his country are still strivng hard for an adequate lifestyle, irrespective of the accomplishments of the scientist.
An underdeveloped country or a third-world country is ravaged by poverty and famines. These countries often produce sporting talent that provides the citizens with a sense of pride. Many footballers who have migrated from these countries to other European countries in search of better lifestyle or standard of living eventually use the developed facilities to become accomplished athletes. Such a situation becomes even more special when these athletes decide to represent their home nation rather than their adopted nation, owing to which, people around the world start taking notice of the countries that they never came across. The achievements of the athletes leads to people noticing the countries they represent but, these achievements are not the right indicators of the general welfare of the country. It is often the case that such countries are in chaos due to famines or civil wars. Probably the reason why these athletes fled the country in the first place.
Proponents of the above statement would state that the during Renaissance, artists were gaining prominence due to the work they were creating. It is still admired by many people of the current century. Moreover, the Renaissance period was a prosperous time wherein the general welfare of the countries were also at a high standard. So it can be inferred that the success of the Renaissance artists reflected on the people of their respective countries as well. I agree that such a time period did exist, but there can be other reasons for such an instance in history to occur. History is replete with incident wherein the achievements of the rulers or the artists did not necessarily signify a prosperous nation.
In sum, I am still a strong supporter of the statement that the surest indicator of a great nation is represented not be the achievements of its rulers, scientists or artists, but by the general welfare of its people. The success and achievements of few does not necessarily reflect a similar state about the general welfare of the country they belonged to.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...a device that is a source of energy for an very long period of time. He does so in...
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Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... is a source of energy for an very long period of time. He does so in order to provide relief ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, third, well, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3076.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 627.0 442.535393258 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90590111643 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00399520894 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82787128311 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414673046252 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 975.6 704.065955056 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3611037416 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.04 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.08 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223209010764 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745196847737 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0998254708055 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166735899217 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101833238784 0.0667264976115 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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