Of the two leading real estate firms in our town Adams Realty and Fitch Realty Adams Realty is clearly superior Adams has 40 real estate agents in contrast Fitch has 25 many of whom work only part time Moreover Adams revenue last year was twice as high as

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"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."

The argument reached the conclusion that Adams Realty is superior to Fitch Realty depending on three comparisons-the number of agents, the revenue last year and the speed of sale. to scrutinize the reasoning, we need to look closely at the assumptions belie these supporting points.
First, the argument assumes that realty with more agents are better at selling house. However, this assumption is not supported by any evidence. For example, what is the average number of house sold by the agents? What is the average property price sold by each employee? Although Adams has more agents, it is likely that many of them did not sell any house and the most revenue come from several gold sales who sold high-value properties. Without this data or other data of employee performance, we would not be able to tell if this assumption holds. Revenue is expected to be positively associated with number of employees. as a results, we could not tell if Adam is better than Fitch without know the average contribution by individual agents to the revenue.
Secondly, the argument assumes that the high revenue of company is associated with individual agent's ability. However, the argument failed to account for the variance within agents. The excellent agents in both companies might have sold similar number and worth of houses while those average agents might account for the difference in the revenue. Thus, it is possible that one could encounter unsatisfying service from both companies’ agents who do a mediocre job in selling houses.
Last but not least, the argument assumes that the economic environment and housing market are equal ten years ago and last year when he/she sold the house. This is unsubstantiated and could bias the conclusion severely. It is likely that ten years ago, the housing market is gloomy as compared to last year's average market, which should be account for the difference in time to sale in the two companies rather than the actual performance of the companies. Without knowing the background of these sales, it would be unfair in making the comparisons.
In summary, there are a few questionable and ungrounded assumptions underlying the argument and reasoning. Without any data or ruling out other potential explanations, the argument would be severely weakened.

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...venue last year and the speed of sale. to scrutinize the reasoning, we need to lo...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...ly associated with number of employees. as a results, we could not tell if Adam is...
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Line 2, column 630, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...associated with number of employees. as a results, we could not tell if Adam is better th...
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Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'agents'' or 'agent's'?
Suggestion: agents'; agent's
...f company is associated with individual agents ability. However, the argument failed t...
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Suggestion:
...ho do a mediocre job in selling houses. Last but not least, the argument assumes...
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Line 4, column 341, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'accounted'?
Suggestion: accounted
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in summary, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13333333333 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7460193412 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6545817686 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.25 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159953084449 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459182941972 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728827395757 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944039263002 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804944677465 0.0628817314937 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1876 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.989 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.893 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.322 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5