Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Scientific discoveries should be shared globally, and the government should not keep them as secrets. Use specific details and examples to support your answer..
The rapid development of technology has enabled many countries to conduct various scientific researches and get a myriad of knowledge from them. it is a well-known fact that our lives can be affected by these findings, and thus, I strongly believe that it is critically important to share scientific discoveries globally and not keep them as secrets. I feel this way mainly because of two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, from my perspective, several human lives could be saved if governments shared their discoveries worldwide. Oftentimes, creating cures or treatments for rare illnesses take a very long period due to its complexity. Consequently, countless people, unfortunately, lose their lives without being treated. however, should politicians share scientific information, scientists would be able to come up with a solution rapidly. For instance, a few decades ago, cancer was a disease that a lot of people suffered, and a one that doctors could not do anything about it. As a result, many nations one day, decided to cooperate with each other and share their discoveries related to this topic to put an end to cancer. Soon after, researchers managed to invent some practical and effective cures for certain types of cancer, which they are still utilized in the present day. this example clearly demonstrates how essential it is for governments to share scientific findings with the rest of the world.
Secondly, it is my point of view that many scientists could be given the chance to come to light. To be more precise, on many occasions, researchers who are developing new theories, have gaps in their information that other people may have found independently, and therefore, they cannot publicly announce their findings. Nevertheless, if these people are allowed to share their discoveries and reach a conclusion together, it would be likely that both of them would be acknowledged and become recognized scientists. To illustrate this point, I will give my father's experience as an example. Last year, my father was doing some research on a monument unearthed in South Africa. he did realize that this construction could be dated to the mid-1400s, but he was not able to determine its specific use. thus, he decided to contact another researcher who was analyzing and studying the same building and was willing to lend a hand to my father's research project. Later, they were able to discover the purpose of this monument and its details. Had they worked separately, they would have never come to a conclusion, and neither would they have been acknowledged for their findings.
Admittedly, some may argue that politicians should not make an investigator's findings known. however, based on the ideas related to acknowledgment and health, we can conclude that governments should share their discoveries globally.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i feel, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2406.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19654427646 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97774148995 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55939524838 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7209533147 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.363636364 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0454545455 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86363636364 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205509725435 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594835420687 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598298068017 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136729450178 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411927458717 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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