The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."The population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer months. During the summer, then, the town council of Balmer Island should decrease the maximum number of moped re

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"The population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer months. During the summer, then, the town council of Balmer Island should decrease the maximum number of moped rentals allowed at each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day. This will significantly reduce the number of summertime accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. The neighboring island of Torseau actually saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents last year when Torseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals. To help reduce moped accidents, therefore, we should also enforce these limitations during the summer months."

The arguments states that every summer the the population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer, which the author assumes makes it highly probable for the people to fall victim to summertime accidents caused by moped accidents.

The argument has not provided sufficient information to support as to why and how these two are interrelated.Furthermore the argument goes on comparing how enforcing limit in their neighbouring town caused the reduction in accidents

without giving plausible reasons for example the author vaguely mentioned the percentage decrease but didnt mention the population of the island.This factor heavily invalidates the hypothesis.

The author continues to draw his hypothesis on many other unfavorable assumptions by linking both the islands and assuming that following the limitations applied by its neighbouring island will bring about similar efficacious result to their island.But the population is a huge factor to ignore on making such assumptions.Futhermore the author didnt provide any statistics or surveys of accidents caused by moped in previous years which might have helped one to draw conclusion.

Accidents can be caused by other factors too,the author failed to consider other factors that might have led to accidents.Population doubling in summertime indicates that people come to the island to enjoy for vacation and spend some leisure time.They might face accidents while fishing in the river,or other fatalities could also lead to accidents.

If there was evidence such as the statistics or surveys that provides enough support to the authors assumption then it would have bolstered the hypothesis, and thus it would have actually led to reduced accidents by decreasing the number of moped rentals.Since there are insufficient answers to fill the blanks,it is not enough to draw conclusion based on baseless assumptions.

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Average: 4.2 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, so, then, thus, while, as to, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 285.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64210526316 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27917968257 2.78398813304 118% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582456140351 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 22.8473053892 249% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.0936820703 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 321.6 119.503703932 269% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.0 23.324526521 244% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.6 5.70786347227 308% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20482341462 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120444768191 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898281571536 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105822926901 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090163645951 0.0628817314937 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.6 14.3799401198 234% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 5.16 48.3550499002 11% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.7 12.197005988 219% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.32 12.5979740519 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.56 8.32208582834 139% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.8 11.1389221557 223% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1564 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.302 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.754 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 49.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.945 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.486 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 1 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5