Some people believe that to be successful at sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion ?

The role of being either talented or industrious in achieving success in the field of sport has been the topic of many thoughts and discussions around the world. While some people believe that innate abilities take more imperative part when it comes to being successful athlete, others think that tenacity and determination play more significant role. I personally believe that inborn talents cannot make someone obtain athletic goals unless they are honed efficiently.

As a matter of fact, athletic performance varies according to people’s physical traits, skills, and experiences. Naturally, it may seem that people with special athletic gifts are more likely to be successfully progressed in different fields of sport. For example, tall youngsters have specialized body for playing basketball or having shorter legs and longer arms may help swimmers to be faster. Thus, being athletically gifted can provide people with more favorable conditions to gain their objectives.

On the other hand, it is widely believed that the key factor in achieving any kind of success is the concerted effort that people make and becoming brilliant sportsperson is no exception. As many famous, successful athletes emphasize, athletic accomplishments are not achieved by only athletes who have extraordinary genetic traits, but by the ones who constantly strive and have determination and perseverance to acquire all skills to gain their goals despite all the limitations and challenges that they may confront with. Take the Paralympics’ medalists who achieve remarkable results in spite of their physical disabilities as example.

To conclude, although it may seem that athletic success heavily depends on the natural abilities that people have, being determined and dedicated has more significant role. In other word, relying on talents cannot bring thriving success for people, but with making honest endeavor people can prevail over any obstacles including not having God-given talents for being an athlete.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, kind of, as a matter of fact, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6131147541 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95240394629 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606557377049 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0631033904 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.666666667 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192230401069 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793993596751 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532989850672 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130627316834 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532362488551 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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