Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. U

Essay topics:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In this mechanazied era, education and studying play an important role for a country to become better.Through the ages, there has been an overwhelming weight of obsession on government`s mind regarding supporting money on which level of education. It`s a little hard to reach a consensus about this issue; however, in numerous circles of experts and pedagogicals, whereas some are inclined toward the opinion that government should spend more money on education of very young children, on the other extreme of the rope, opponents believe that universities need more financial support; while, both sides have their own poition, from my vantage point, first one carries more weight. In what follow I will delve into some conspicuouses aspects which persuade me to put forward this perspective.

To commence, the first point I would like to make is that, always base and first level of everything is the most important factor, in addition, if the base of something is strong and correct, everything going to be well until the end of that thing. Let me illustrate that in other word. For example, if the elementry school doesn`t have enough financial suopport in order to hiring good teachers with high level of knowledge and experience, the education and studying of the students become endanger. My own experience is compelling example of what I mean. When I was a student, I asked for some advice from my teacher for my future aducation. He said to me wrong things that now when I was think about it. I wish I could turn back to that years and don`t do the things that my teacher said to me.

Second reasons coming to my mind to substantiate and indicate my stand point concerning this issue is, if the government don`t pay enough attention to the talent and instrests of young children, they can`t have a successful future, thus, it`s not possible for that country to develope. Technology is developing so fast that people couldn`t keep up with, that unless, they keep increasing their knowledge. Base on what I mentioned, the government should spend money to building more schools, improve the school`s facilities and etc. For instance, they should provide more camputer system, electronic boards, also they should spend more money on student`s visit to scientific places do the best for young children education.

Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exception which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that, government should spend more money on young children. To recapitulate the reasons, not only the future of students become peril, but, the country can`t develope, because, the successful of one country deponds on that students.

Votes
Average: 8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Through
...ant role for a country to become better.Through the ages, there has been an overwhelmin...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 697, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'thought'.
Suggestion: thought
... to me wrong things that now when I was think about it. I wish I could turn back to t...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 796, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...don't do the things that my teacher said to me. Second reasons coming to m...
^^
Line 5, column 549, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...s, improve the school's facilities and etc. For instance, they should provide more ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i mean, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17647058824 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88161142497 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.006050678 48.9658058833 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.0 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.625 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269515053236 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809127391177 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757749792865 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166480705954 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523153389179 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 10.002688172 295% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.