TPO 53 Task 2

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TPO 53 Task 2

Nowadays, the government are responsible to provide facilities which make easier for people to live a peaceful life. In this vein, many people are believe that the government should focus on improving public transportation more than the access to the Internet. In Contrast, some others hold an opposite opinion, stating that the government should spend more money to improve access the Internet than to provide high quality public transportation. I personally concur with the former group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborated in the following paragraphs.

First of all, the public transportation is superior to the internet access, because public transportation directly affect the health of people living in a society. In fact, the poor public transportation cause that people drive their car, increasing the number of automobile in the city. Therefore, the level of air pollution and traffic congestion dramatically increases, which results in many diseases related to heart and respiratory system of humans. For example, in cold season, the value of air pollution in big cities is very serious because people use their automobiles to be secure against cold weather when they are waiting to bus and trains.

Secondly, improving the public transportation directly have positive effect on the financial issues of people and helps them to save more money. In the other word, the expenses of travelling by public bus and sub trains are much lower than driving private car because of high cost of maintenance, and fixing cars, as well as providing fuel. Therefore, if the government spend its budget improving the level of public transportation, for example increasing the number of buses and expanding the route of buses around the city where people are residing, people will prefer to use the public transportation to do different daily activities such as going to work, and shopping, to name but a few.

To conclude, it is better that the government improve the level of public transportation by allocating more money to that. Not only does it have many positive influences on the health of people by decreasing the traffic congestion and air pollution, but also it encourages people to use public transportation and helps them to save more money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 528, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'elaborate'
Suggestion: elaborate
...p for two main reasons, on which I will elaborated in the following paragraphs. First o...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in contrast, in fact, such as, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22465753425 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94455679381 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506849315068 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.9230769231 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.692307692 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0769230769 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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