People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and supporting

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Some people contend that people's behaviors are limited with outer forces, as one has to comply the rule and ethos of the world. However, from my perspective, as the individuals, we are capable of deciding what we are going to do. In the most of time, we are unfettered to determine our behavior.

Admittedly, it's true that sometimes people's behavior is obviously influenced by outer factors. This is because people are living in a society where many rules and ethos have been instituted to make sure the order of it. Therefore, everyone should control their behaviors out of regulations of the society. To be more specific, for living, one has to work every day and complete the workload assigned by their immediate superior, even though most of them are reluctant to be bombarded with endless work for a whole day. Working for living is obviously determined by external factors, rather than following one's own will.

That being said, I have to point out that motivated by subjective purposes and ideas, people have right to behave on their own initiative. In order to pursue noble ideals, people would not only choose their occupations but also the types of lifestyle. You Tu, the owner of the Nobel Prize in the field of physiology in 2015, dedicated her life and much effort into the extraction of artemisinin for treating malaria. She experienced failure for many times to achieve success, which was considered as an extraordinary contribution to whole world. From this case, the factors have not direct relation with her resolution and spirit.

More importantly, driven by kindness and sense of yearning for contribute to others, people would determine their behaviors, even abandoning external factors, such as status, fame and fortune. In this case, one has extreme desire that he/she help others without considering any return. Bill Gates is one of the most lavish businessmen in this world, owning his personal charity trying to diminish the number of death in remote areas and help people in underdeveloped countries who are suffering contagious diseases. From 1994 to 2020, he has donated over 35 billion to needy people. Once, in an interview, he imparted to media that he will deliver all his fortune, not leaving anything to his children. In this case, it's no doubt that he overlooks all external factors and completely select his life on his own.

In a nutshell, although sometimes each one is under limitation of social norms and conditions, people are playing the critical role in deciding behaviors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 243, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'helps'.
Suggestion: helps
...ase, one has extreme desire that he/she help others without considering any return. ...
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Line 7, column 718, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...anything to his children. In this case, its no doubt that he overlooks all external...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, as to, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05741626794 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70384887622 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586124401914 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4545835657 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.7 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16199833946 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448075817677 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296069941426 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0814170230107 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429092607461 0.0667264976115 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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