Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
After the industrial revolution, the human being has been bringing many adverse impacts on the global environment. As a result, many species were already distinct, and the number of endangered species is continuously increasing in modern society. In this situation, whether our society should make efforts to save all endangered species or focus on specific species affected by human activities is a contentious issue. Although there are many different opinions on this issue, I believe that our society should try to save all endangered species. I would like to present several reasons to support my claim in the following essay.
Admittedly, some people may think that it is a waste of money to save all endangered species. However, the ecosystem is a highly dependent and interconnected system. Each species cannot exist alone, and all species can affect each other. For example, when certain species are distinct, this may bring a colossal impact on the whole ecosystem in the region. If the species have a critical role that controls a complex food web, the distinction of the species causes unbalance of the food supply system in that region. As a result, more species would be disappeared. For these reasons, it is nearly impossible to distinguish between the result of human activities and natural phenomena. Therefore, society should take care of the ecosystem based on a total system perspective.
In addition, nowadays, the impact of human activities is too broad and enormous, so every species that lives on the earth could be affected by them. For instance, Climate change is an important problem in current society, and it causes many distinctions of species in the global environment. It changes the annual average temperature in the local habitat, and the fundamental productivity of the ecosystem in each region. Furthermore, it causes extreme heavy rainfall or drought in some regions. These impacts by Climate change will bring many distinctions of species and destroy the biodiversity around the world. To mitigate the impact, all societies and countries must participate in reducing the emission of carbon dioxide. By only doing so, we can protect endangered species from the detrimental effect of Climate change.
In conclusion, although some people might not agree with my idea, I think that we should take an action to protect all endangered species and our global environment. Because it is the most effective way to save endangered species.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 439, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...a contentious issue. Although there are many different opinions on this issue, I believe that ...
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Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...red species and our global environment. Because it is the most effective way to save en...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25252525253 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86675671302 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510101010101 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7180825509 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.5454545455 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13636363636 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260448995813 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775010489869 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592571907102 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169097504939 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521253290994 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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