Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, parents are busier at working and earning money to support their daily expenses. Parents have limited time to spend on their children. In this case, some people think busy parents should spend time having fun with their children, while others agree that parents should do things together which are related to schoolwork. In my opinion, I will prefer to spend time doing the things related to schoolwork. There are two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, having parents supervise and help their children with the homework, children might be more efficient. All children in the world are afraid of their parents' punishment. Under their control, children might boost their potential and be more focused on their schoolwork. My experience is the best illustration of this. When I was in elementary school, my parents only had time to spend with me on the weekend. They always watched me finishing my homework and asking me about the school performance in school. Under the supervision of my parents, I not only felt stressed and put more effort into school works but also be more efficient. If I did terrible works, my mother would punish me, so I just kept focusing on the works so much. I could finish the homework two times faster than usual.

Secondly, children might be happier when they are praised by their parents. Parents could praise their children during the time they spend together on the things which are related to schoolwork. The praise might be the fuel of learning of children and having significant influences on their performance. Having these compliments, children might be more hardworking and confident on the school works, because they want to earn their parents approval. As the result, children will be more outstanding in school performance and keep reaching higher goals. It will provide more benefits than just playing games and sports during the time.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that busy parents should spend their time with children doing things related to their schoolwork. Children might be more efficient and pay more attention to homework and also keep completing achievements to earn parents compliments.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16713091922 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5820750418 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476323119777 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7374984025 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3181818182 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3181818182 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367704886961 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128778745454 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125098998519 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26581886165 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974792426245 0.0645574589148 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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