Do you prefer experienced doctors or young doctors

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Do you prefer experienced doctors or young doctors

Do you prefer experienced doctors or young doctors

It goes without saying that getting awesome treatment is very important as this helps to reduce the death rate. While some people prefer to get treated by baby doctors, I utterly concur with receiving treatment with experienced doctors. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will develop in my body paragraphs.

To start with, experienced doctors are more knowledgeable when it comes to handling chronic cases. To explain broadly, the long-time medical practitioner has been practicing for multi decades, therefore, they have broadened their horizons on every part of illnesses that could affect a human being. In fact, they have an overarching knowledge of any disease state and the right approach to getting it solved. My personal experience is a good illustration of this. Four years ago, my mum developed ovarian cancer, which my siblings and I thought would claim her life. She stays in the suburb so I had to move her down to the city in order to get adequate treatment. I explored several hospitals hoping that she would be completely free, yet her state of health keeps deteriorating. On one bright sunny day, I had the opportunity to watch a health program where the speaker of the talk opened up to be an oncologist that has been practicing for thirty years. I called in while the program was on and fortunately, I was able to get the details of the specialist. I took my mum to his clinic and he eventually made the right diagnosis and started treatment immediately. Luckily, my mum began to respond to treatment, and as they passed by she continues to feel extremely better. Also, the doctor pinpointed the errors in initial treatments she has gotten from the previous hospitals. Many thanks to the oncology virtuoso that serves as a bulwark to my family. If I hadn't taken my mum to see the specialist, obviously I would have lost my mum to the cold hands of death.

On top of that, when experienced doctors see patients, they try to present cases in an appealing way. To be more specific, they instill positive mindsets to patients' relatives, even if they knew the person won't survive the illness. For example, a friend of mine got involved in a ghastly accident a few days before her birthday, she was rushed down to the hospital. Her phone was checked to see if they could get any of her relations. Fortunately, they called her mum and she quickly rushed down to the hospital. The mother was wailing, when she saw her daughter, but the doctor keeps telling her everything will be fine. Three days after, she gave up the ghost, and the doctor was able to talk to the mother in a way that won't make her feel totally down.

In light of the reasons mentioned, I prefer seeing experienced doctors. This is because they have acquired numerous skills in the field of medicine and because they try to disclose information to patient relatives in an optimistic way.

Pls can I get evaluation on this?

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example, i feel, in fact, to start with, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2464.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76595744681 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68981367217 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52998065764 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3673906903 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2592592593 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1481481481 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81481481481 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183458050964 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514015173532 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106929233655 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210778130551 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.354063719498 0.0645574589148 548% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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