The article and the lecture both deal with electronic medical records. Whilst the author claims that electronic databases are better than paper-based for three reasons, the lecturer contradicts his arguments respectively.
First, according to the reading, electronic records helps decrease cost for storage and transfer of medical records. In contrast, the professor argues that electronic records cannot actually save space because doctors usually keep the paper version as a backup or in case signatures are needed for legal reason.
Second, the writer states that by using electronic records doctors can avoid making mistakes. However, the lecturer questions his argument by saying that doctors still use pen and paper to write down patients' information by hand during medical examination. Then those information is entered into the system by other staff members, who may make errors at this stage.
Last but not least, the author posits that electronic records are helps for doctors to collect useful information for research. As opposed to the writer, the speaker points out that there are restrictions on using patients' medical information required by privacy law. doctors have to follow many strict steps to ask patients for permission, which usually denied by patients.
The article and the lecture both deal with electronic medical records. Whilst the author claims that electronic databases are better than paper-based for three reasons, the lecturer contradicts his arguments respectively.
First, according to the reading, electronic records help decrease cost for storage and transfer of medical records. In contrast, the professor argues that electronic records cannot actually save space because doctors usually keep the paper version as a backup or in case signatures are needed for legal reason. Therefore, the electronic version does not reduce cost at all.
Second, the writer states that by using electronic records doctors can avoid making mistakes. However, the lecturer questions his argument by saying that doctors still use pen and paper to write down patients' information by hand during medical examination. Then this information is entered into the system by other staff members, who may make errors at this stage.
Last but not least, the author posits that electronic records are helps for doctors to collect useful information for research. As opposed to the writer, the speaker points out that there are restrictions on using patients' medical information required by privacy law. Doctors have to follow many strict steps to ask patients for permission, which patients usually deny offering as it is not used for the therapy.
As we can see, the author and the lecturer hold very different views on electronic medical records
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...s still use pen and paper to write down patients information by hand during medical exam...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1260.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 231.0 407.700716846 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45454545455 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61715433697 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614718614719 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9236261311 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443284190945 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172374148282 0.076458572812 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163957438681 0.0737576698707 222% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277796740536 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.23026031239 0.0645574589148 357% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...s still use pen and paper to write down patients information by hand during medical exam...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1260.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 231.0 407.700716846 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45454545455 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61715433697 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614718614719 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9236261311 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443284190945 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172374148282 0.076458572812 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163957438681 0.0737576698707 222% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277796740536 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.23026031239 0.0645574589148 357% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.