Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, by the advent of media and it’s undeniable effect on human being’s lives, new dilemmas have been brought about. A controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether it is a proper habit to be aware of all events happening around the world using. Some people possess the conviction that getting informed from all incidents is not necessary, whereas others hold exactly the opposite view and allege that this would be waste of time. I personally contend that although this data might be beneficial, it’s demerits outweigh merits. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that from a psychological point of view, this behavior might have undesirable effects. In other words, Due to large number of appalling events that every day occurres around the world, if we want to pay attention to all of them, we will feel depressed. This depression not only cannot resolve any problem, but also can conduct us to horible mental and spiritual conditions. The noteworthy statisttics revealed by recent research conducted in our country show that more than 70 percent of people feeling depressed are addicted to follwing news.
The second rationale behind this issue is rooted in the fact that paying too attention to other issues instead of concentrating on our tasks, can inevitably be pernicious to our occupational and private life. In fact, following news can cause this through two ways. The first one is through dicreasing concentration and, the second way is through wasting invaluable time that we spend on following news. In order to make it more clear, consider my personal experience. When I was a bachelor student, I tended to follow news from different channels, for instance, TV news, radio, newspaper, and social media. I was aaware of any events occurred in foreign countries. Howaver, I did not realize wasting of my precious time. My grade was fallen and I failed in three courses in that semester. Had I concentrated in my tasks and assignments instead of news, I would not have fail. This tough experience shoed me that persistent following news how much can be detrimental.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that pay excessive heed to news is not a beneficial habit. Conseuently, it is highly recommended that individuals strike a right balance between their tasks and following news.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: ITS_JJ_NNSNN[27]
Message: Did you mean 'its undeniable effect'?
Suggestion: its undeniable effect
... modern era, by the advent of media and it’s undeniable effect on human being’s lives, new dilemmas ha...
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Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 4, column 251, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...between their tasks and following news.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, whereas, for instance, in brief, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11483253589 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85124511071 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602870813397 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9150874358 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.80952381 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0728510126671 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0211329686045 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0254024367875 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0437114707405 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174900052194 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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