The following statement appeared in a consumer magazine:A fear of crime has led many homeowners to purchase monitored burglar alarm systems, but these people are wasting their money. The primary benefit of any burglar alarm system is one of deterrence, an

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The following statement appeared in a consumer magazine:

A fear of crime has led many homeowners to purchase monitored burglar alarm systems, but these people are wasting their money. The primary benefit of any burglar alarm system is one of deterrence, and this effect can be achieved just as well by having a sign in front of the house suggesting that the house is equipped with an alarm, whether or not the alarm system is monitored or even exists. Moreover, if a sign fails to deter burglars from entering a house, there is very little chance that the guards who monitor the alarm system will arrive at the home in time to catch the burglars, since the burglars will surely leave as soon as the alarm sounds. Therefore, while it makes sense to have a sign suggesting that a house has a monitored alarm, and it may make sense to have an audible alarm, there is no reason to pay the high monthly fee for a monitored system.

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion, be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative examples or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.

In some countries there is some problem about burging. For solving this problem people equiped their houses with an burglar alarm system. However, this solution can take a lot of maney from them. Of course there is some advantages of alarm system like to detect the thieves during enter the house. But, disadvantages of this monitored system is that if it fail to determine the burglars you can not find the burglers who enter your house and they can easly run away from there.

From my point of view the best way to solve this problems is to purchase the audible system and sign which show that this house has protected with monitor. In this situation when burglars want to enter your house they can see the sign and do not risk to enter for burging. Other way, if they do not see the sign then audible alarm system is going to start and they leave house as soon as possible or guide catch them.

There are some other alternatives for protecting house. For example, you can buy dogs which are prepared for protecting from unknown person. It is good way, because, dogs are very loyal to their owners and there is a little possibilty that dogs can not determine doubtfull things and thieves run from their hands. Thats way, accoding to me protecting home with dogs from burglar is not bad solution.

Other alternative is that you can create some secret tricks and link them with your phone. After you leave your home or sleeping you start these tricks with help of your phone and burglars who enter your house be tricked and your phone start to alarm to you and then you can call police for arresting burglars.

Of course, we can find a lot of example or alternatives for protecting houses from thieves. But, it is individual choice that who see which alternative is the best choice he or she choose this one. However, government also take into considerations for this situation. Of course, for implementing some of these considers take a lot of money from budget, but health and wealth of people are more important.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...roblem people equiped their houses with an burglar alarm system. However, this sol...
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Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are some advantages'?
Suggestion: there are some advantages
...ake a lot of maney from them. Of course there is some advantages of alarm system like to detect the thie...
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Line 1, column 357, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fails'?
Suggestion: fails
... of this monitored system is that if it fail to determine the burglars you can not f...
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Line 3, column 45, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... my point of view the best way to solve this problems is to purchase the audible sys...
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Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risk entering'.
Suggestion: risk entering
... house they can see the sign and do not risk to enter for burging. Other way, if they do not ...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...hings and thieves run from their hands. Thats way, accoding to me protecting home wit...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dogs from burglar is not bad solution. Other alternative is that you can create...
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Line 9, column 182, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...lternative is the best choice he or she choose this one. However, government also take...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'for example', 'of course']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233933161954 0.25644967241 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.177377892031 0.15541462614 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0539845758355 0.0836205057962 65% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0437017994859 0.0520304965353 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0822622107969 0.0272364105082 302% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.125964010283 0.125424944231 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0334190231362 0.0416121511921 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.32093108122 2.79052419416 83% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0282776349614 0.026700313972 106% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0771208226221 0.113004496875 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0231362467866 0.0255425247493 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0205655526992 0.0127820249294 161% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2026.0 2731.13054187 74% => OK
No of words: 359.0 446.07635468 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.643454039 6.12365571057 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.261838440111 0.378187486979 69% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.181058495822 0.287650121315 63% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.130919220056 0.208842608468 63% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0779944289694 0.135150697306 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32093108122 2.79052419416 83% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 207.018472906 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454038997214 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 46.7182104442 52.1807786196 90% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9444444444 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9604298404 57.7814097925 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.555555556 141.986410481 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9444444444 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.724660767414 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 38.0502940266 51.9672348444 73% => OK
Elegance: 1.29661016949 1.8405768891 70% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267834026065 0.441005458295 61% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.160402574954 0.135418324435 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.105391685388 0.0829849096947 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.546348161956 0.58762219726 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.167176266273 0.147661913831 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103761446503 0.193483328276 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805690972871 0.0970749176394 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.223517352773 0.42659136922 52% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.106975316398 0.0774707102158 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169366208463 0.312017818177 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889742424018 0.0698173142475 127% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 14.657635468 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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