130) The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants. "Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers

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130) The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.

"Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers have filed a formal complaint, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, to avoid the expense of purchasing butter, the Happy Pancake House should extend this cost-saving change to its restaurants throughout the rest of the country."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

In this statement, the author argues that the the change from butter to margarine does not have a huge impact on the customers. To bolster this, the author cites that only a small portion of customers have complaint about the change and also customer do not complaint when margarine is served instead of butter. However, the argument is tenuous in several aspects.

One of the major problems is that 2 percent of customers have complained does not necessarily mean that the amount of complaint is trivial. it is possible that after the change, the majority of the customers who feel unhappy with the change have already decided to not going to this restaurant anymore. thus, the manager might have only collected the opinions from the remaining customers. Moreover, even though only the data about 2 percent is credential, the author does not mention the base number for their customers. it is possible that they asked opinions from 1000000 customers, and 2 percent of 10000 is 20000, which means that a significant amount of people are unsatisfied with the change.

The manager’s report about the amount of complain the servers received is also dubious. it is possible that the manager lie about the number of complaint from customers because margarine is much cheaper than butter. also what exact number does the word ‘many’ refer to?

it is possible that the manager coincidentally asked those who did not receive complaint from the customers. Since the manager did not conduct a thorough survey that include every servers working for Happy Pancake House restaurants, it is unjustifiable to make the conclusion that the customers feel indifferent between butter and margarine.

it is untenable to assume the customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the same word to refer to either butter or margarine because there is only few complain. it is possible that some customers did not explicitly show their dissatisfaction; perhaps they complaint with their friends or in their minds. also the assumption that the impact of the change from butter to margarine on consumers is small is not substantiated. because consuming artificial butter for a long period of time is undeniable harmful to human body. thus, a more thorough consideration should be made before stating that using margarine has only little effect on customers.

In sum, the author statement is logically flawed and the evidences used to support the proposition is also not credible.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, incidentally, moreover, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28641975309 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81785627322 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454320987654 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9447238608 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.684210526 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3157894737 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94736842105 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189022094341 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583703582932 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047973308734 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949925221937 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543366793262 0.0628817314937 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 405 350
No. of Characters: 2026 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.486 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.002 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.655 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.242 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.439 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.764 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5