41. A ten-year nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates that ten years ago, approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets, whereas today that number is nearly 80 percent. Another study, howe

The author concludes that the government mast pay more attention to bicyclists safety than to advise them to wear helmets, because the research give an increment of accidents which are connected with bicyclists. The author’s line of reasoning is that the bicyclists after wearing the helmet would be forgot about other risks and consequently more often would be victims of accidents. This argument is unconvincing for several reasons.

Firs of all, the author’s statement is based upon the questionable assumption that the during one decade ago 35% of cyclists wear helmets and now it is plumed to 80%, however, about suppositions probably it would be relevant with the increasing of population or fun of cycling the author don’t gives any information. Moreover author declare that……….

Secondly, the author assumes that terribly boosting even to the 200% of accidents which are connected with bicyclists. Although, not a scrap of evidence that these accidents participants was in helmets or not. It seems equally reasonable to assume that author have to give more vivid reason to declare connectivity of accidents to wearing a helmet.

Finally, the author fails to consider that the people rather must would be taught about safety , than to require to wear a helmet during the cycling. For example, for children which starting to learn wallow on bicycle the first fundamental rule is wearing helmet before cycling and in most cases it save them from seriously head injuries. Because the author’s argument lacks a complete analysis of the situation, the authors requirement to emphasize to taught people about cycling safety can not be taken seriously.

In conclusion, to convince me that the information have not any weighty dates, the author would have to provide evidence that the bicyclists wearing the helmets feel themselves more safely and it would be led them to any accidents. Without this additional evidence, I am not convinced that the government must focus on educating people about bicycle safety out of requiring to wear a helmet.

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Average: 6.3 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29393939394 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88641248631 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518181818182 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.0188685364 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.384615385 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 5.70786347227 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120205528042 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462299745894 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340933089926 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770488160504 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180700738508 0.0628817314937 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1678 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.069 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.685 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.61 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.634 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5