According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year.
The argument stated above is flawed because it is based on many incomplete assumptions. There may be many reasons behind abatement in the number of audience of Super Screen production movies.
First and the foremost, the actual reasons behind people not turning up to watch Super Screen-produced movies can be many. It may be possible that most of their movies are released in months of February, May, September, etc. when most of the children have their exams and therefore their families don't turn up to watch the movie. Had it been mentioned that the movies were released throughout the year, the conclusion would have been more satisfactory.
Moreover, it might be possible that the theatres in some of the populated areas did not showcase the movie due to any reason like an argument with the company. Thus a huge population of people living in such areas was automatically cut off from being the audience. Had the author mentioned the exact reason behind reduction in the number of audience, the argument would have been in a better position to be evaluated.
Finally, the author fails to mention the exact statistics showing the number of people who used to watch and the number of people who actually watched these movies during the past year. If the difference between both the numbers is actually high, say there is around 50% decrease, the company's decision to spend more on advertising can definitely be considered taking into care other factors mentioned above.
Thus, the author leaves behind many loose ends which all together fail to effectively lead to the conclusion mentioned.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 267 350
No. of Characters: 1304 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.042 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.884 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.554 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.747 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.681 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...heir exams and therefore their families dont turn up to watch the movie. Had it been...
^^^^
Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... might be possible that the theatres in some of the populated areas did not showcase the mo...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ason like an argument with the company. Thus a huge population of people living in s...
^^^^
Line 5, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the exact reason behind reduction in the number of audience, the argument would h...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 266.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04511278195 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61426095425 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575187969925 0.468620217663 123% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5597480109 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.833333333 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146834896535 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051942809537 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05412758555 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.068389654134 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463960611058 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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