Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at

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Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The stated argument avers that there is a decline in population of the arctic deer because of global warming which debilitates the deer from migrating island to island over the solid pathways created by frozen sea. But the argument fails in providing sound evidence that might support the conclusion drawn from the stated assertions to be only possible explanation of the situation. Several evidence have varied impact on the plausibility of the argument.

To begin with, the statement details that the arctic deer search for food by moving over ice, but there is no fact stating that this is the only means of commute available. While this might appear plausible that only means for deer to get to other islands is through moving over the frozen sea, any evidence proving that any chain of small islands or land that might aid in this migration does not exist in the area. The deer might be able partly swim and walk over these tiny sporadic pathways of land to migrate to other islands.

Additionally, as it has been mentioned that at least for some time of the year habitat of deer is areas with cold temperature only points that these dear might not be able to survive the colder regions of ice over frozen sea. Evidence stating that these dear are not demised by the temperature of the ice itself would have eradicated this possible explanation for the decrease in deer population.

Moreover, as stated that reports have been collected from hunters, these hunters might be giving false reports only to sustain their covert excessive hunting. There is a good possibility that these hunters might be the only reason for decrease in number of these deer. There is no fact to substantiate that the hunting of these deer has not increased in the area. Or any number indicating the consistent population of hunters and hunting rate in the area would have strengthened the argument by eliminating the possible explanation of excessive hunting.

Conclusively, the argument has tried to provide a plausible explanation for the situation but is underdeveloped and the facts are distorted. Therefore a further substantiation with specific evidence might help in eliciting the right cause for decline the number of arctic deer.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 384, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: Some evidence
... possible explanation of the situation. Several evidence have varied impact on the plausibility ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t on the plausibility of the argument. To begin with, the statement details tha...
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Line 9, column 142, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...rdeveloped and the facts are distorted. Therefore a further substantiation with specific ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, at least, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00806451613 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63883077383 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.449689875 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.071428571 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213567032943 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782549090897 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708621061446 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125075478015 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500614677586 0.0628817314937 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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