Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced

In the memo from the director of the super screen movie production company, the director recommend to increase in fund for advertising in order to aware the people about the quality of the movie. The author gave his recommendation based upon the reviews given by the reviewers that the quality of the movie is good and the decrease in the number of customers are due to the lack of proper knowledge about the quality and content of the movies. Upon outer inspection, it seems plausible, however, upon the closer inspection, the author need to considered answers to the following questions for the greater realibily of the given argument.
First of all, what are the causes that are responsible for the decrease in the numbers of people attended super screen produced movies? the authors impetuously assumes that the decrease in the number of the movie viewers is due to the negative attitude of poor quality towards their movies. However, it might be possible that the increase in availability of the movies in the youtube, people started watching movies in the youtube from their home rather than going to the super screen movie. Furthermore, it might be possible that , there is an establisment of the other movie center and most of the people went there rather than the super screen movie center. Also, it might be possible that there is some types of disastor such as volcano, as a result, people were less interested in watching movie. Hence, the author most considerrd the above possible alternative, otherwise the recommendation might be flawed.
Secondly, do the quality of movie is good? Of cousrse, it might be possible that the quality of the movie is not good. Though, reviewers claimed that the quality of movie is good but there is no sufficient evidence to show that the quality of movie is good. It might be possible that the quality of the movie is not good and most of the people don't like to watch such a poor quality of movie. Hence, the author most answer to the questions related to the quallity issues. If the above answers were tryue then the author recommendation will be undermined.
Thirdly, do increase in the advertising will increases the customer? Of couse there might be possible that the increasing in the advertising, there is no increase in the level of customers then the cost of advertising will be useless. It might be possible that the population of the states decreases significanlty because of some other problems such as domestic violence, natural disastor, etc. Hence, author most consider the possible answers to the above questions. If above stated answer is true then the author recommendation will be seriously weakened.
In a nutshell, the author hastily assumes that the decreases in the customer is due to lack of awareness and after awaring them through advertisement the level of customer will surely increased. So for the greater reliability of the given argument, the author most consider the possible other reasons for decreasing level of customer so that the validity of the given argument can be incresed.

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Average: 5.9 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... attended super screen produced movies? the authors impetuously assumes that the de...
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Line 2, column 255, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ewers is due to the negative attitude of poor quality towards their movies. Howev...
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Line 2, column 531, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... Furthermore, it might be possible that , there is an establisment of the other m...
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Line 2, column 694, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are some types'?
Suggestion: there are some types
...center. Also, it might be possible that there is some types of disastor such as volcano, as a resul...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f disastor such as volcano, as a result, people were less interested in watching ...
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Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ovie is not good and most of the people dont like to watch such a poor quality of mo...
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Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...estions related to the quallity issues. If the above answers were tryue then the a...
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Line 4, column 46, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...ly, do increase in the advertising will increases the customer? Of couse there might be p...
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Line 4, column 469, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ossible answers to the above questions. If above stated answer is true then the au...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...ement the level of customer will surely increased. So for the greater reliability of the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 515.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95339805825 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70312297828 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.372815533981 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6972112485 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.954545455 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4090909091 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143570498668 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528237866819 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825895390943 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873075470238 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073211327459 0.0628817314937 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 516 350
No. of Characters: 2496 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.766 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.618 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.237 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.401 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.208 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5