In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The passage indicates that in order to cut down the incidence of car accident, Prunty County should appropriate policy of Butler County, which is to broaden road width, repair the rugged ones and enhance visibility in several areas. It uses the maintaining accident rate in the last year, the prevalent violation of regulation in the county and the success of Prunty County’s regulation. The recommendation does has some merits, while it can be vulnerable to refutations since more evidences are needed to make it tenable.
First of all, the author proclaims that the regulation of speed limit wan’t working in Prunty County. Drivers are also violating the law. Therefore, new policies are necessary to cut down on the rate of car accident. However, the only evidence of the statement is the statistics from the last year. Is there possibility that the ratio isn’t dropping because it wasn’t implemented until the last two month in the year? If that is the case, then more promotion of the law may be necessary to let the people in the town notice the limit, and it may turn out that it is actually useful by observing for a longer period. The writer of the passage need evidence to prove this statement to make his recommendation tenable.
Moreover, the assumption the author takes is that the rate of car accident is a result of speedy driving. Nevertheless, is there possibility that alternative causes are reasons for most of the accidents? For example, no penalty on drink and drive may be the contributor of crushes. If that is the case, then suggestions made by the writer may not be useful. In other words, the author needs more evidences to prove that other methods are not better to make the incidence drop down.
Similarly, in the passage, it can be realized that the author believes the experience of Butler County can be implant on Prunty County. His assumption should be the situation, or reasons why car accidents occurs are similar. Nevertheless, the reason why car accident happens easily in Butler County may be very different from Prunty County, with former results from poorly maintained transportation construction, but latter fallout of driving too fast. The author may seek more pieces of evidence to show that the factor lead to car accidents are likely the same in the two counties, or his argument may be fallacious.
In a nutshell, the passage is unfounded as the author need more evidence to prove his recommendation feasible. He needs to prove that promotion of current regulation is useless, no other method may be more wrathful than his, and the situation in the two counties are similar that appropriating one to another is reasonable.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2164 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.767 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.703 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.619 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.963 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.501 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 15, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment may be fallacious. In a nutshell, the passage is unfounded as the author n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9977827051 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83896190908 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476718403548 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6979584987 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4761904762 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119655341078 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399536059667 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484467172362 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728279849144 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422479268926 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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