The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.
The author puts forward an argument that illegal immigrants pose threat to a country and a country should put their full effort in sending them back but the premises on which the argument is based on is highly flawed and does not support the conclusion the author comes to. It makes a couple of assumptions which do not seem convincing enough.
Firstly the author mentions that illegal immigrants endanger the economy and national identity but fails to give some statistics on which the author made such premise. It is possible that the illegal immigrants might be some very intelligent people who had no chance but to fleed their country and thus can prove to be rather resourceful than being criminal. Without the lack of any statistics to support it is unjustified to consider this as a truth. It might be possible that the nation has a high crime rate in general and is not dependent on the amount of illegal immigration happening.
It would also have helped which country in specific has the author based his argument on and why. It is possible that this might be true for one country but might not be other.What about the countries from which people are fleeding out. Does this still hold true there? It would thus have been helpful if the author would have mentioned the countries which was the reference source for them. This is important to know as laws change from country to country. And it is possible that one country might have such laws which supports the illegal immigrant and doing crimimal activity would not be advantageous for them. Thus without knowing the country laws it is hard to say if illegal immigrants will always go into crime or harm the economy.
The author also just blatantly implies that all illegal immigrants pose threats. But without any crime statistics this argument just seems flawed and biased. Any reliable and sourceful survey would have helped in making the argument stronger. Is might be possible that the crime rate is genrally higher in the nation and the people doing the crimes are not at all illegal immigrants but rather the localities of the country only.
It would also have helped if author would have mentioned the amount of illegal immigration happening and included more information about the diversity of the people immigrating. Factors like their age, education status, assets they have, their health status etc, would have helped a lot in understanding the illegal immigrants situations and whether they are even capable of doing such things. For instance if a lot of illegal immigrants are old people, it is highly unlikely that they would be any threat to the local folks of the country.
Thus in conclusion the author makes a generic argument based on premises which have no reliable source and is not convincing enough. There were a lot of assumptions made which makes the argument weak thus making it sound flawed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 493 350
No. of Characters: 2356 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.712 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.779 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.426 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.67 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e author based his argument on and why. It is possible that this might be true for...
^^
Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: What
... for one country but might not be other.What about the countries from which people a...
^^^^
Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had mentioned'?
Suggestion: had mentioned
...ld thus have been helpful if the author would have mentioned the countries which was the reference s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 617, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ity would not be advantageous for them. Thus without knowing the country laws it is ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had mentioned'?
Suggestion: had mentioned
... It would also have helped if author would have mentioned the amount of illegal immigration happe...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...t to the local folks of the country. Thus in conclusion the author makes a generi...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, still, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 492.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88617886179 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46943106026 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406504065041 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6206157154 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.272727273 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3636363636 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263685143169 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922383020913 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665433018863 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153294896232 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749031080197 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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