The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago Furthermore there has been

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The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

This argument about the improvement of citizens of Forsythe’s healthy lifestyles is based on various assumptions that lack adequate information and compelling reasons, thus resulting weakened and doubtful.

In the first place, the author states that citizens’ responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform to the government nutritional recommendations more than they did ten years ago. However, it is nowhere stated in the argument more information about the survey that people took. For instance, we do not know how many people responded to the survey, nor their age range. If most of the people who responded to the survey were adults or parents, then it would be probable that they had a healthier lifestyle than most teenagers or university students who live on their own. Thus the survey would not result adequate to evaluate the overall lifestyle of Forsythe citizens.

Moreover, the author does not describe what are the government recommendations. It is assumed that the latter would be healthy and approved by local doctors and nutritionists. However, this is just an assumption the author does which, if proven unwarranted, can undermine his claim. For example, let’s say that the government recommendations are based on economic gains: instead of recommending healthy products suggested by nutritionists, the government advertises products produced by local farms or shops in order to boost sales despite they do not represent the healthiest choice. In this case, citizens following these recommendations would not improve their eating habits, thus opposing the claim of the author.

Another assumption the author makes regards the higher sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that reduces cholesterol. Here the author assumes that more sales implicate that more citizens of Forsythe are consuming these products, thus resulting in healthier lifestyles. The truth is that there isn’t enough information to back up this implication: it might be that a big industry that produces and ship these products all over the country just opened recently. In that case, higher sales, which include cities other than Forsythe, would not represent an increase in kiran consumption among the citizens, thus gainsaying what the author claims.

Furthermore, it is written that reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizenzs regularly consume, represents another proof of lifestyle improvements. This assumption lacks compelling explanations: if sulia was proved by nutritionists and doctors to have detrimental effects on the human body, then this claim would have been appropriate. Since it is nowhere stated that this product negatively affects the human body, just the fact that few of the healthiest citizenz of Forsythe consume it is not enough to prove that is an improvement in healthy lifestyle.

In conclusion, I would say that the author’s argument is based on many assumptions that lack adequate and compelling reasons and information. A greater insight on the survey, recommendations, and the products stated in the argument would strengthen and bolster the author’s claim.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2685.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47959183673 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0089696535 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481632653061 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3599810332 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.25 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265033165526 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808806999698 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140842935436 0.0701772020484 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1226025856 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142376180852 0.0628817314937 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 98.500998004 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2598 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.291 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.889 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.709 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5