The city council of Town X has proposed reducing the city’s electric expenses by switching all the lights in public buildings from incandescent bulbs to light-emitting diodes (LEDs). The switch would be made gradually as the old incandescent bulbs burn out, and the city council reasons that since LED lights burn brighter and cost no more to purchase, the switch would help Town X save money on electrical costs in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to help evaluate the efficacy of the city council’s proposal to save money on electrical costs. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the council’s prediction.
The write up here argues about the way city X can save their expense from electric bill. Though the recommendation given here seems plausible at first glance, it has some serious flaws which has already weakened the proposal. The flaws are identified, incoprporated and possible statements which could have been strengthen the proposal are given below.
Firstly, the proposal is given for reducing the electric cost of town X only by switching to LED lights. The flaw here is clearly found and that is why a town should consider only switching the bulbs for the only factor of reduction of the electric bill? Is there any survey or research findings that the electric bill is only increased by the usage of lights?The expense can also be reduced by using less of electrical tools like washing machine or electric oven. As there is no clear indication of the factor/s which can play significant role/s in reducing the expense, it will be imprudent to consider that only shifting to a different type of bulbs will be fruitful in order to decrease the costs. The argument could have been strengthened if there was a mention about any statistical information regarding the relation of light usage with the electric expenditure.
Secondly, no direct information could be retrieved from the argument about how the shift in bulb or lights will result into the minimization of the electricity bill. There is only information about the LED light being burned out brighter than the existing one. It can be inferred from the passage that the two types of bulbs cost similar, so depending only one distinguishing factor, which might not have any significance in reducing the spending on electricity, the proposed suggestion cannot be implemented. The indication of the price difference and varience in energy usage would have been regarded as strong statement for the given situation.
Finally, the city council has considered the public buildings only. But how can we consider that only the public building can come forward in the savings of electrcity spending? The quantity of public buildings is not mentioned thus we can not decide that only public buildings can contribute in this initiative. In all the households, corporate buildings, restaurants, educational institutions the proposed suggestions should be implemented as this will result into the aggregate reduction of the City X's electric expenditure.
In a nutshell, the council of town X should consider all other factors that might corroborate their proposed initiative. They should conduct significant research on the factors affecting the electricity expenditure of City X, should properly calculate the cost of switching to LED lights from the incandescent bulbs and obviously the findings from the research conducted should be applicable and implemented for all kind of private, commercial, public and educational institutions and thus I believe the savings from electric bill will increase dramatically.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The flaws are identified, incoprporated and possible statements which could have been strengthen the proposal are given below.
Error: incoprporated Suggestion: incorporated
Sentence: The indication of the price difference and varience in energy usage would have been regarded as strong statement for the given situation.
Error: varience Suggestion: variance
Sentence: But how can we consider that only the public building can come forward in the savings of electrcity spending?
Error: electrcity Suggestion: electricity
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2449 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.145 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.863 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 118 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.415 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
The write up here argues about the way city X can...
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Line 1, column 313, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...ssible statements which could have been strengthen the proposal are given below. Firstly,...
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Line 2, column 360, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...s only increased by the usage of lights?The expense can also be reduced by using le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28752642706 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9382496211 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471458773784 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 774.0 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.0073624579 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.944444444 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2777777778 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332700953876 0.218282227539 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107250728642 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638323024252 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18217335982 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651889974662 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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