Essay topic: In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department

The argument claims that the municipal government of Mason City desides to invest more money for improvement of the Mason river . The main reason for it that the city government predict to develop the water sport. On the ather hand there are several solid arguments for contradicting it.

First , the authors argument readily assumes that after the reacreation of the river side for sport facilities the water sport would be increase. This statement is stretch, aforesaid argument may be not to effect to extend the types of water sport. For example, not all of the city residents want to use the river for sport, it is not guaranteed that the deal of people crave for using the river for totally another needs. Clearly, probably in Mason City are live amount of people whose want to use the river for generate electricity or to water plants or garden. The argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that all of the population of Mason City suppose to develop the water sport .

Second, the argument claims that the people of Mason City use the river for sport rarely because it has a bad quality to be more clear they don’t like the odor from the river . This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrated any correlation between indirectly only more money for sport facilities and qualitative leap of the water sport among the Mason City inhabitants. To illustrate , it is impossible to develop without the advertising the various types of water sport .While the Mason river previously was used for sport seldom not fact that it increased rapidly after devoted more money . However, afterwords from cleaning the pollution the mason river would be used judiciously, indeed the river in the city would give the huge potential for developing get better.

In fact, it is not at all clear that using the river for sport facilities are better than other one, rather the water sport would be worsen the quality of the water. For instance, there are a lot of people will come to the riverside during the sport competitions , it will lead to risk of dirtying the river more than before. In the argument had provided evidence that the use more money for develop the sport facilities a good way to satisfy the needs of Mason City, then the argument would have been a lot more convincing.

Finally, it is it is that it can’t do only allocate funds for sport facilities. Who can give the guaranties that after the reacreation of riverside for sport the City people run to go for in sport? Is it possible to avert of pollution of Mason River after using for sport? Without convincing answers to this questions one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.

In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefor unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts of budget for developing of reacreation of sport facilities in Mason River. In order to assess the merits a certain situation it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors. In this particular case, to make a thorough surveys amang the Mason City residents, what give us more information about this argument. Without it the argument remains unsubstantiated open debate.

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Average: 4.6 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2802.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 571.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90718038529 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66228292751 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430823117338 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 895.5 705.55239521 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8663517431 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.75 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7916666667 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70833333333 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 5.15768463074 252% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 34.0 5.25449101796 647% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327841494742 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122252257191 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786720439498 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159927433664 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738387601429 0.0628817314937 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Sentence: The argument claims that the municipal government of Mason City desides to invest more money for improvement of the Mason river .
Error: desides Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: On the ather hand there are several solid arguments for contradicting it.
Error: ather Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: First , the authors argument readily assumes that after the reacreation of the river side for sport facilities the water sport would be increase.
Error: reacreation Suggestion: recreation

Sentence: Who can give the guaranties that after the reacreation of riverside for sport the City people run to go for in sport?
Error: reacreation Suggestion: recreation

Sentence: In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefor unconvincing.
Error: therefor Suggestion: therefore

Sentence: It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts of budget for developing of reacreation of sport facilities in Mason River.
Error: reacreation Suggestion: recreation

Sentence: In this particular case, to make a thorough surveys amang the Mason City residents, what give us more information about this argument.
Error: amang Suggestion: among

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 572 350
No. of Characters: 2721 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.89 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.757 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.574 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.122 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5