Essay topics: "Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty.
In the letter from the homeowner to a friend, he suggests that if his friend wants to sell his house quickly and at a good price, he should prefer Adams Realty to Fitch Realty based on various unwarranted assumptions. His recommendation seems plausible at a glance but is fallacious on meticulous analysis.
Firstly the number of real estate agents Adams has is stated as 40 and Fitch as 25, many of them working part time. Based on this we cannot say that the Adams is more effective. What if being only 25 real estate agent though, more of them working part time, are more effective than the 40 real estate agents in Adams realty? Also, the average revenue compared among two realties seems fallacious. What if the average revenue of Adam’s includes more numbers of houses sold at lower price than average price whereas Fitch Realty had sold few houses at very low prices and hence the average value of revenue comes out to be lower that Adams.
Secondly, the homeowner’s experience of selling house 10 years ago may not work for the current situation. What if the Fitch Realty then is not same as that now? What if it has been more efficient, diligent and effective now? These questions seriously undermine the homeowner’s conclusion.
Thirdly, if in the last year homeowner had listed his home to be sold in Fitch Realty, it might have sold his house in lesser than a month. Even if Adams Realty had sold his house at good price and efficiently by Adam a year ago, how would he confidently recommend his friend to get good price and work will be done by Adam efficiently? What if the Adam Realty degraded within a year?
In sum, the recommendation of the homeowner is based on unwarranted assumptions and unsubstantiated conclusion. To strengthen his conclusion, questions above must be answered and more rigorous study must be done to make the conclusion and recommendation.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1521 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.666 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.622 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.269 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'Fitch' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'fitches'.
Suggestion: Fitches
...te agents Adams has is stated as 40 and Fitch as 25, many of them working part time. ...
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Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...0 and Fitch as 25, many of them working part time. Based on this we cannot say that the A...
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Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'agent' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'agents'.
Suggestion: agents
...tive. What if being only 25 real estate agent though, more of them working part time,...
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Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...tate agent though, more of them working part time, are more effective than the 40 real es...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84662576687 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82302098405 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506134969325 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7294844499 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.75 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301749162884 0.218282227539 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111848418554 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120692380101 0.0701772020484 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147061741758 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11977794121 0.0628817314937 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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