Essay topics: The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following
recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
The argument is about the internet usage from workstations for recreational activities. The vice president of human resource at Climpson industries has stated that the company should implement electronic monitoring of employees. He also has mentioned about taking strict actions regarding the working hours that are hampered due to recreational activities such as shopping, games and has suggested that such employees should be punished for the same. He makes an assumption that implementing such rules can prevent employees from wasting time ,foster better work ethic which will lead to better efficiency and add up to the profit. The argument sounds pretty convincing at the vice presidents point of view. But looking deep into it the argument has major unjustified assumptions and loopholes.
Firstly, guiding the employees or even allocating them their work assignments is fair as per the company is concerned. keeping a check on the timeline of work scheduled is also plausible. But interfering with work patterns of the employees will not only steep down the efficiency of the employer but also the quality of work will be affected. Every candidate has their own way of working and completing the work. Some prefer working for a few hours and finishing the job while some like to take their time to time breaks but still complete the task .So continuously alarming the employee of his/ her tasks and nosing the working style will indeed reduce the overall profits.
Secondly, human mind works and performs as per their own functioning. One cannot be expected to work day and night just because the other candidate does. Work patterns that do not allow the employees to take any breaks makes the work look tiresome and uninteresting for them. The employees will neither perform with any interest not give any quality output. In fact they will be in a hurry to finish the job and obviate it. Small refreshment breaks are conducive to better outputs. So the company in fact can allot some specific time for refreshment and not interfere with the way the employee wants to do it. Some may prefer just sipping a cup of coffee and get aside from the computer while some may like to indulge into their personal work on internet.So the vice president can in fact study this work pattern and make any stringent rules for the benefit of company.
Understanding the work pattern and temperament of employees is crucial for the company .But also, the company has to keep thorough watch on the tasks if hampered by this. The refreshment time or the leisure time allotted to the employees should be in balance to the work hours as to which any job assigned does not remain incomplete. Or else there are chances that atmosphere in the overall company becomes indulgent than needed and the employees will not find it necessary to get the job done within the time limit. Hence, the vice president should create a balance between the working hours and leisure hours to keep the working conditions lively and efficient.
To sum up, the memorandum has unquantifiable relevance's without considering the efficiency of the employees working in the company .The vice president can in fact conduct a survey of employees as to manage their timing and a lot them good for themselves as well. Also ,he should garnish the work type that is given to each employee. There are chances that the employees could be getting same time of work every day which has decimated their interest in working and so they find other entertainment sources to avoid the work. Without all these scrupulous analysis and shreds of evidence it would not be justified to imply any rules in the company.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
this is out of topic. it is not an GRE issue essay but an argument essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 617 350
No. of Characters: 2996 1500
No. of Different Words: 276 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.984 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.856 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.6 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.731 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.241 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.47 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... can prevent employees from wasting time ,foster better work ethic which will lead...
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Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Keeping
...s fair as per the company is concerned. keeping a check on the timeline of work schedul...
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Line 3, column 549, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
... time breaks but still complete the task .So continuously alarming the employee of...
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Suggestion: So
...ime breaks but still complete the task .So continuously alarming the employee of h...
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Line 5, column 620, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
...y the employee wants to do it. Some may prefer just sipping a cup of coffee and get as...
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Suggestion: So
...ge into their personal work on internet.So the vice president can in fact study th...
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Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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... of employees is crucial for the company .But also, the company has to keep thorou...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...f employees is crucial for the company .But also, the company has to keep thorough ...
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Line 9, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... efficient. To sum up, the memorandum has unquantifiable relevances without co...
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Line 9, column 132, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... of the employees working in the company .The vice president can in fact conduct a...
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...f the employees working in the company .The vice president can in fact conduct a su...
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Line 9, column 269, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t them good for themselves as well. Also ,he should garnish the work type that is...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for themselves as well. Also ,he should garnish the work type that is given to e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, as to, in fact, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 11.1786427146 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3053.0 2260.96107784 135% => OK
No of words: 616.0 441.139720559 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95616883117 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63828969293 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 204.123752495 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 935.1 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2249451561 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.074074074 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8148148148 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03703703704 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129395720023 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476323332941 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643298213049 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930065908945 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482465041949 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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