THE FOLLOWING APPEARED IN AN ARTICLE WRITTEN BY DR. KARP, AN ANTHROPOLOGIST. “TWENTY YEARS AGO, DR. FIELD, A NOTED ANTHROPOLOGIST, VISITED THE ISLAND OF TERTIA AND CONCLUDED FROM HIS OBSERVATIONS THAT CHILDREN IN TERTIA WERE REARED BY AN ENTIRE VILLAGE RATHER THAN BY THEIR OWN BIOLOGICAL PARENTS. HOWEVER, MY RECENT INTERVIEWS WITH CHILDREN LIVING IN THE GROUP OF ISLANDS THAT INCLUDES TERTIA SHOW THAT THESE CHILDREN SPEND MUCH MORE TIME TALKING ABOUT THEIR BIOLOGICAL PARENTS THAN ABOUT OTHER ADULTS IN THE VILLAGE. THIS RESEARCH OF MINE PROVES THAT DR. FIELD’S CONCLUSION ABOUT TERTIAN VILLAGE CULTURE IS INVALID AND THUS THAT THE OBSERVATION-CENTERED APPROACH TO STUDYING CULTURES IS INVALID AS WELL. THE INTERVIEW-CENTERED METHOD THAT MY TEAM OF GRADUATE STUDENTS IS CURRENTLY USING IN TERTIA WILL ESTABLISH A MUCH MORE ACCURATE UNDERSTANDING OF CHILD-REARING TRADITIONS THERE AND IN OTHER ISLAND CULTURES.”
First of all, a conclusion taken 20 years back by dr. field which is written and published another anthropologist dr.karp be generalized and compared ? there are chances that the observations made by dr. field 20 years back that children living in the group of islands that includes tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village could have been vise-versa. which makes the argument tenuously weak.
secondly, could we compare the methods of survey done by dr. krap and dr.field ? thre are chances that the method of survey by both doctors which are carried out 20 years apart are completely different which would elicit different result and would make the argument weak.
thirdly, the result obtained b dr.krap is completely opposite by dr.field but it does not allow dr.krap to assume the outcome by his observations to be true and does not assure the dr.fields conclusion to be completely invalid as there is no sufficient evidence of outcome. thus if the it cannot be assumed that the dr.kraps survey is valid and dr.fileds surv ey is invalid. which makes the argument insignificant.
the method used by dr.kraps graduate students cannot be compared to any other methods or there is no standard benchmark st for the comparison of methods and there positive or negative outcome so there is no guarantee of accuracy in dr.kraps interview method carried out by his team of graduates.
Thus to conclude, there are too many unwarranted assumptions in the given prompt which could be only analyzed if the author provides more reinforcing evidence or atleast gives any solid hint which could make the prompt viable. according to given details in prompt it doesn’t hold much of water to viable.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 5 15
No. of Words: 296 350
No. of Characters: 1455 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.148 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.916 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.592 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 59.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.496 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.526 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 1 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...t dr.karp be generalized and compared ? there are chances that the observations made ...
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Line 1, column 443, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...the village could have been vise-versa. which makes the argument tenuously weak. se...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 443, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the village could have been vise-versa. which makes the argument tenuously weak. se...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...ch makes the argument tenuously weak. secondly, could we compare the methods of survey...
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Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thre
... survey done by dr. krap and dr.field ? thre are chances that the method of survey b...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thirdly
... and would make the argument weak. thirdly, the result obtained b dr.krap is compl...
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Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...e is no sufficient evidence of outcome. thus if the it cannot be assumed that the dr...
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Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: thus,
...e is no sufficient evidence of outcome. thus if the it cannot be assumed that the dr...
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Line 7, column 283, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...sufficient evidence of outcome. thus if the it cannot be assumed that the dr.kraps sur...
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Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...valid and dr.fileds surv ey is invalid. which makes the argument insignificant. ...
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Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...valid and dr.fileds surv ey is invalid. which makes the argument insignificant. ...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... makes the argument insignificant. the method used by dr.kraps graduate studen...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ried out by his team of graduates. Thus to conclude, there are too many unwarra...
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Line 15, column 228, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: According
...int which could make the prompt viable. according to given details in prompt it doesn&apo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 295.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09491525424 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66406362087 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528813559322 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.2598957927 57.8364921388 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.357142857 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18875895123 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785368611129 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064762219694 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102334397821 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758025723962 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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