The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter to the editor of Balmer Island Gazette raised issues on the number of moped related accidents in the Island. The recommendation to tackle this issue is to curtail by fifty percent the number of mopeds allowed to be given for rent. While the issue raised is an important one, the envisioned reduction in the number of accidents may not be attainable because the reasons to support the employment of the recommendation raises a few questions.
First, is the relationship to limit the number of rental mopeds directly proportional to the accidents occurring in Balmer island? It could be possible that there are only a few drivers who ride mopeds in a haphazard manner, potentially causing accidents. Perhaps the majority of drivers involved in accidents are the ones who own their mopeds and do not rent from agencies. If this turns out to be true, then the argument does not hold water as there are a variety of factors involved rendering the relation between leased moped not directly proportional to the number of accidents.
Second, do most of the people in the Island depend on rental companies for getting mopeds? This may not necessarily be the case because it is probable that many residents on the island own their mopeds. It could be possible that the rental companies have very little customers as compared to the mopeds owned by the individuals in Balmer. An alternative possibility could be that there are a few rental companies in Balmer and limiting will not significantly reduce mopeds on the roads. If either of these turn out to be true, then the recommendation to cut back the number of mopeds allowed to be leased may not be as effective as envisioned in the letter to the editor.
Third, are the traffic conditions in Seaville similar or identical to the conditions in Balmer island? It could be the case that both areas do not share any similar traffic conditions such as roads, safety regulations, speed limits, etc. Thus, the reasoning based on something that may be present in Seaville, which could be not be in Balmer does not sound logical. Hence, the argument is falling apart.
In conclusion, the island may not be able to achieve the envisioned reduction in the number of accidents related to mopeds due to the concerns raised above. If the raised questions are responded with satisfactory explanations, then further actions may be taken to solve the problem of moped related accidents in Balmer.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 1986 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.706 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.371 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.371 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 202, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a haphazard manner" with adverb for "haphazard"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... are only a few drivers who ride mopeds in a haphazard manner, potentially causing accidents. Perhaps...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, second, so, then, third, thus, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89855072464 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76252903412 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434782608696 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9664983161 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.666666667 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226699594967 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958885942101 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096795622451 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148210284238 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457246320146 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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