The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette On Balmer Island where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation the population increases to 100 000 during the summer months To reduce the number of accidents involving

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Author claims that Island should limit the number of moped rentals to decrease the accidents. But author have not given any convincing statical representation of reliable data. Moreover, in conclusion, author gave recommendation that if Seaville’s island made achievements by limiting the moped rentals. Again author has not presented any clearance on believing that it would be the solution to lessen the accidents in the Balmer Islands.

Fist of all, author states that with the limitation of the moped in the Balmer Island, this area could be safer for the people who visited here. Since, writer has not shown any reliable statistical data to believe, so we can not rely on the statement. Again, author claims that in summer season the number of accidents occurrence is increasing but without clear, data we can not rely on that. It might be happen that in winter season the number of accidents events took more than summer. Moreover, without knowing the present rentals , we can not say limiting moped can save the accidents life.There might be less moped rentals than the proposed limitation of moped number. If this is the case, then this proposed idea would not work to reduse the aciidents.
Secondly, author suggests that moped is major vehicles and if authority limit it, then accidents can be reduced. But, there is no clear evidence that moped is the major travel. If moped is limited then people can use car so may be the accidents occur more. So, there is not mentioned any other safer transportation if moped is decreased. Moreover, if people can not visit this island then there would be economical loss for the governments.

Thirdly, author recommends that if authority follow as like the Seaville's town then there might be less accidents in Balmer Islands. But writer has not presented any clear data to rely on that. Furthermore, he should give the total information of the Seaville island so that we can compare. It could be probability that the road condition was good there and they used more moped so that proposed idea worked for them to reduce accidents.

In conclusions, authority should not rely on unclear and unreliable data to make the such kind of decisions. Besides, author should represents clear data to believe and establish the steps to save the people lives.

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Average: 5.3 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ver, without knowing the present rentals , we can not say limiting moped can save ...
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Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'accidents'' or 'accident's'?
Suggestion: accidents'; accident's
...can not say limiting moped can save the accidents life.There might be less moped rentals...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...iting moped can save the accidents life.There might be less moped rentals than the p...
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Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... moped can save the accidents life.There might be less moped rentals than the pro...
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Line 4, column 404, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...t visit this island then there would be economical loss for the governments. Thirdly, ...
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Line 6, column 100, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun accidents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... the Seavilles town then there might be less accidents in Balmer Islands. But writer...
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Line 8, column 133, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'represent'
Suggestion: represent
...nd of decisions. Besides, author should represents clear data to believe and establish the...
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Line 8, column 216, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ish the steps to save the people lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9974025974 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63434181002 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451948051948 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3427136576 57.8364921388 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.619047619 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157121000112 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553267541639 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042065302012 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959099666588 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050853951014 0.0628817314937 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1865 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.832 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.518 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.952 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.81 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5