The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The topic states that for reducing the number of accidents in Balmer Islands,there should be a decrease in the amount of moped rentals during summer time when population increases to 100,000. In first look,this conclusion of limiting rented mopeds in the city seems simple and logical. However, the author has failed to render strong statiscial evidence or logic for the argument and also fails to prove the direct relationship between rented mopeds and the accidents. The author needs to address certain assumptions before reaching the conclusion.
Firstly,the author has not provided any evidence on how the rented mopeds are the only mode of transportation responsible for accidents.Pedestrian accidents may have several reasons that author needs to take into account. It is more likely that personal vehicles belonging to island's inhabitants may contribute more to accidents since they are used throughout the year while rented moped are used only in summer months.Moreover,the author also needs to extensively check or study the island's traffic system for examining it's efficiency like traffic police presence,working street lights and signal systems at crossings etc.
Furthermore,the author has stated that by limiting the number of rentals,the annual reductions in moped accidents will be 50 percent,inspired from last year's reduction seen in neighboring island with same laws.However,this basis is weak since it has many loopholes which the author needs to consider. It may be possible that numer of mopeds used in Seaville is much higher than Balmer,therefore limiting them may have reduced the accidents by half. But we cannot project the same for Balmer without knowing various statiscial measures like precentage of rental mopeds to total mopeds,rental moped's share in accidents in Balmer.It is likely that the new law may lessen the number of accidents, but a reduction of 50 percent is highly presumptuous.
In conclusion,the argument has several weak points that cannot be overlooked easily which needs to be addressed by the author for convincing the readers. The author also doesn't provide sufficient statistics and decent evidence to support the argument and needs to take important factors into account for proving the direct relation between rental moped and accidents.The author could strengthen his argument by documenting its important premises with data or actual surveys.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 2003 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.189 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.558 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.353 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.415 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.634 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...he number of accidents in Balmer Islands,there should be a decrease in the amount of m...
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Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[2]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...e in the amount of moped rentals during summer time when population increases to 100,000. I...
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Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...tion increases to 100,000. In first look,this conclusion of limiting rented mopeds in...
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Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , the
...re reaching the conclusion. Firstly,the author has not provided any evidence on...
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Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Pedestrian
...ransportation responsible for accidents.Pedestrian accidents may have several reasons that...
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Suggestion: Moreover
...ed moped are used only in summer months.Moreover,the author also needs to extensively ch...
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... are used only in summer months.Moreover,the author also needs to extensively check ...
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... efficiency like traffic police presence,working street lights and signal systems at cro...
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Suggestion:
... and signal systems at crossings etc. Furthermore,the author has stated that b...
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Suggestion: , the
...ems at crossings etc. Furthermore,the author has stated that by limiting the ...
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Suggestion: , the
...d that by limiting the number of rentals,the annual reductions in moped accidents wi...
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Suggestion: , inspired
...ns in moped accidents will be 50 percent,inspired from last years reduction seen in neigh...
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Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...s will be 50 percent,inspired from last years reduction seen in neighboring island wi...
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Line 9, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: However
...en in neighboring island with same laws.However,this basis is weak since it has many lo...
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Line 9, column 218, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , this
...eighboring island with same laws.However,this basis is weak since it has many loophol...
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Line 9, column 385, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...d in Seaville is much higher than Balmer,therefore limiting them may have reduced the acci...
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...centage of rental mopeds to total mopeds,rental mopeds share in accidents in Balmer.It ...
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...tal mopeds share in accidents in Balmer.It is likely that the new law may lessen t...
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Suggestion: , the
... highly presumptuous. In conclusion,the argument has several weak points that c...
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Line 13, column 171, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...convincing the readers. The author also doesnt provide sufficient statistics and decen...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...tion between rental moped and accidents.The author could strengthen his argument by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55706521739 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16054805008 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.8063586464 57.8364921388 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 185.909090909 119.503703932 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4545454545 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 5.70786347227 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173027238171 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735419870515 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826283483812 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111626399816 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660820654921 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 14.3799401198 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.3550499002 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.56 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.32208582834 118% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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