The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.
"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In this given argument the author claims that, in young-league sports injuries are more in number of students and also other disadvantages with it so Parkville should stop this organized athletic competition for children under nine. I completely disagree with the author and would argue that sports tournament is have an equal importance as academic. However, on closer analysis of this argument one can easily identify flaws and loopholes that make this argument weaken. These flaws and loopholes are based on the vague assumptions and facts that have been presented in the argument.
Firstly, I would like to point out that in the claim it is given that throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered from injuries. The author assumes that children below nine age are increasing last year without any strong evidence. Perhaps it same number of students or a decrease in the number of students. We do not know about that and there is no evidence given for that claim. These facts would seem insignificant for a reader who reads the argument for the first time, but on closer analysis, it can be said that this fact emerges the weakest link in the given argument.
Secondly, according to the interviews for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure by coaches and parents to win the games. The author sounds equivocal as he denotes that over 40,000 of students suffered from the injuries, the author is trying to prove his claim in two ways. In addition, some experts say that this time could be utilized in academic activities as well. This claim is also not making any sense that all students should have to focus only on the academics. There is no supporting evidence presented in the given argument that can prove statements of the author.
To sum up, as we have seen above, according to that it can be said that the conclusion of the argument sounds unconvincing due to a lack of substantial evidence. To bolster it further, the author must give clear concrete evidence which can help to prove it. Finally, to better evaluate this argument it would be necessary that the author should give more information on why Parkville should discontinue athletic competition for children under nine.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 1940 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.416 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...d would argue that sports tournament is have an equal importance as academic. Howeve...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00753768844 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64536473801 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497487437186 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6353256725 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.235294118 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4117647059 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213018068643 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681929926334 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134781671798 0.0701772020484 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135386723066 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114746282571 0.0628817314937 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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