The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client."Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienc

In this memo, the author recommends that as demand for heating oil will increase, investment in Consolidated Industries is favorable. The author points that the northeastern region in United States is suffering continuous cold weather which is likely to continue to be severe in the next few years. The author also reasons that the increase of new house construction is expected, the usage of heating oil will increase naturally. However, it seems to be specious in several respects.

To begin with, the author argues that natural increase in using heating oil is naturally predicted phenomenon due the regions’ upcoming cold weather. Yet, the author is overestimating the weather reports accuracy, without checking its credibility. What if the weather forecast for the past several years were so unmatched that majority of local residents were decrying of its wrong information? Unless the weather forecasting skill is confirmed to be credible enough, it is too hasty to believe their information and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries.

Even if the population growth will affect this region appears to be true, the author is relying on the assumption that the increased demographic figure will occur new house demand increase. Yet, the author might be overlooking the region’s current house conditions. Perhaps, the area is suffering lack of space to construct new houses resulting in implementing renovation of old houses of which are mostly not confirmed of heating methods. Old houses may have used radiator using hot vapors which doesn’t need fuels. Thus as insufficient evidence that new houses will be constructed and they will use heating fuel are prevailing for now, more data is required to reinforce the reliability of investment recommendation.

Even if the two forgoing assumptions appears to be true, the author is relying on an assumption that the heating oil will maintain its major place being the main source of heating onward. Indeed, some will use it for its familiarity, nevertheless, as heating technology is developing constantly, new methodology is likely to be introduced in the future. Perhaps more energy-efficient heating method could become materialized in the near future. If such method save up maintenance fee then residents will likely to change their heating power. Therefore, rather than investing in Consolidated Industries, investing in heating power R&D industries might be more promising unless providing confirmed premise that heating oil will be the constant main heating power.

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it, the credibility of local weather forecast should be confirmed enough to suggest investment in Consolidated Industries. To better assess the argument, we would need to know the future trend of heating source, and population growth will occur new house supplement to this area which will increase the heating usage.

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Average: 4.9 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reports'' or 'report's'?
Suggestion: reports'; report's
...he author is overestimating the weather reports accuracy, without checking its credibil...
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Line 5, column 528, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...t vapors which doesn't need fuels. Thus as insufficient evidence that new house...
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Line 7, column 446, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...become materialized in the near future. If such method save up maintenance fee the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2489.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47032967033 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02719150687 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496703296703 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8362992761 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.523809524 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124384875511 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432245913595 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356359389684 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763038547405 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341136531893 0.0628817314937 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

argument 1 -- not OK.

argument 2 -- OK

argument 3 -- somehow duplicated to argument 2. need to argue against:

Because these developments will certainly result in an increased demand for heating oil, we recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 457 350
No. of Characters: 2409 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.624 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.271 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.913 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 74 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.762 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.023 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5