The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager One month ago all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one t

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The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.

"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."

In the letter of the owner it is stated that the Sunnyside Towers can be more lucrative if they install advanced showerheads in all the twelve buildings rather than just the first three. The conclusion is based on the fact that newer showerheads restrict the water flow to one-third of it's original value and hence save water. However before evaluating this decision three questions are needed to be answered.

Fist of all, The statement mentions about few complaints about low pressure which raises the question, do people in the building often use showers? What if the majority of the people just make do from the taps because of the fact that showerhead water does not supply enough water at one go. For instance a person who does not use a shower might still be using the same amount of water and since the statement mentions few complaints about showerheads this might mean majority does not use it and in that case there won't be any significant difference between the water usage and thus it weakens the argument.

Secondly, what if they are using the showerheads for longer duration or perhaps basically using the same or more amount of water? For example a person who consumes two litres of water while taking a shower might be consuming the same amount irrespective of the flow of water as the time duration for which he takes shower has increases three times to compensate the restricted flow. If such things happens there might not be any savings for the company hence the argument does not hold water.

Lastly, what if they use alternate sources of water as the showerheads does not supply enough pressure? One can use tap water or perhaps could buy a new showerhead which might increase the overall waster usage. For example a person can buy a showerhead which pumps 2 times the water the original showerhead used to pump which intern puts the company owner at loss. This certainly puts the argument at a disadvantage.

In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the owner is able to answer the three questions above and offer more evidence regarding the actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the the viability of the proposed recommendation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...f the people just make do from the taps because of the fact that showerhead water does not supply enough...
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Line 9, column 327, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...n it will be possible to fully evaluate the the viability of the proposed recommendatio...
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Line 9, column 327, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...n it will be possible to fully evaluate the the viability of the proposed recommendatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87121212121 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59285644619 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484848484848 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7795189153 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.6 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.70786347227 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197262537924 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735012408566 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664241309442 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124721270687 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0899386491555 0.0628817314937 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1892 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.766 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.533 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.527 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5