The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
Owner of Sunnyside Towers apartment complex stated that by restricting water flow by modifying showerheads lead to reduce water wastage. He stated argument on the basis of reply of residents presides only on three floors of the apartment. Whether, owner of the complex has to answer some questions before considering this will be lucrative.
First of all, by only restricting the water pressure of showerhead will it reduce water consumption? and hence will it result in considerable savings? There might be possibilty that after modifying showerheads, people will use bathtubs for bathing and consume more water. Furthermore, Only restricting showerheads will reduce water consumption? People might use more water for other domestic purpose than bathing. Hence, on basis of some unwarranted assumptions, owner can't predict profits by less water consumption.
Secondly, Does water consumption by residents of only three floors constitutes overall tower's water consumption? People who live above three floors might use more water than third floor residents. Also, few complaints won't decide the consumption of water, there might be possibilty that most people neglect to complaint or they find alternate source of bath. Hence, again, due to lack of research and surveys of residents, argument of owner about increasing profits by advocating water reduction does not hold water.
In conclusion, owner of Sunshine Complex suggestions about augmenting profits by restricting water consumptions using absurd idea of modifying showerheads seems vague. To prove his point, he need to modify showerheads of all residents who presides there and also alternate ways such as to lower water pressure through main line of water tank.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 264 350
No. of Characters: 1432 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.031 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.424 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.771 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.163 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.432 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Owner of Sunnyside Towers apartment complex stated that by restric...
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Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... only on three floors of the apartment. Whether, owner of the complex has to answer som...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...rhead will it reduce water consumption? and hence will it result in considerable s...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ad will it reduce water consumption? and hence will it result in considerable sav...
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Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... of some unwarranted assumptions, owner cant predict profits by less water consumpti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, third, as to, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 19.6327345309 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 263.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57794676806 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86547249912 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543726235741 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1028600275 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235018981384 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934876420768 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985676369456 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169773959329 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745175341784 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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