The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has
spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing
costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower
than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new
programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in
Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of
physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument
and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument engender that Clearview is the best place of old retired people to address due to it’s low taxes and available services that is fullfilling retired people needs. This recommendation could be investigated through a set of evidences.
For instance, evidences are needed about the physicians, high number that are present in the town, role in maintaining a good level old people health care. Perhaps, a lot of physicians but lack of hospitals and medical care that is seriously needed for old people who are more likely to required some medical special care. Thus, revealing the availability of a high level of health care for people in Clearview bolster the article’s recommendation about Clearview suitability for retired people.
Furthermore, the article’s author has mentioned that housing cost in Clearview has significantly fall during the past year. Then the author has to provide an evidence about the current average of the costs of houses and apartement. Maybe costs have been fallen but still significantly high in comparison to the other neighbour towns. Thus, this evidence, if proven true, would bolster the argument validation.
Moreover, the recently promise of Clearview mayor about new public services improvement need to be clarified that it would be achieved during a short period of time. Thus, old retired people would have the accessibility to get these services in their expected lifetime.
In addition, the author needed to show what exactly is the predicted public services that would be enhanced. Perhabs it’s services intended to serve youth or young couples who have recent baby and childern rather than old retired couple or an old man leaving alone for example. Whereas, this mentioned public services could be schools or parks and zoo, which address childern interest than old people entertaining.
On the other hand, the author ought to shape the available medical care level at the moment in order to let the old people to get a proper medical service by the time of their settlement in Clearview town and not with in a period of time in the future. Consequently, retired people would get the tendency to move to Clearview town without any risk taking or hesitating about their important services that is urgently needed by the time of their arrival to the town.
These previously illustrated evidences are a sample of a set of evidences that is needed in order to evaluate the addressed article’s recommendaton properly and reveal the extent of how much this recommendation could be validated.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2086 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.039 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.734 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.804 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.666 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument engender that Clearview is ...
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Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'engenders'.
Suggestion: engenders
The argument engender that Clearview is the best place of old...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vestigated through a set of evidences. For instance, evidences are needed about...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...arview suitability for retired people. Furthermore, the article's author h...
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Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'fallen'.
Suggestion: fallen
...ing cost in Clearview has significantly fall during the past year. Then the author h...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...would bolster the argument validation. Moreover, the recently promise of Clearv...
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Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...hat it would be achieved during a short period of time. Thus, old retired people would have th...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e services in their expected lifetime. In addition, the author needed to show w...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...interest than old people entertaining. On the other hand, the author ought to s...
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Line 6, column 227, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ent in Clearview town and not with in a period of time in the future. Consequently, retired pe...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the time of their arrival to the town. These previously illustrated evidences a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, thus, whereas, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21256038647 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88791123004 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5422358472 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.941176471 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3529411765 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64705882353 5.70786347227 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110936176146 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417394514031 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412263776543 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0573448519534 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325280902774 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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