The following appeared in a memo from the Board of Directors of Butler Manufacturing.
"During the past year , workers at Butler Manufacturing reported 30 percent more onthejob accidents than workers at nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour
shorter than ours. A recent government study reports that fatigue and sleep deprivation
among workers are significant contributing factors in many on the job accidents. Therefore,
we recommend that Butler Manufacturing shorten each of its work shifts by one hour .
Shorter shifts will allow Butler to improve its safety record by ensuring that its employees are
adequately rested."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order
to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to
explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The Board in its memo makes an argument for shortening the shifts at Butler manufacturing to improve its safety record. The Board supports it by providing evidence in the form of reduced on-job accidents at nearby Panoply Industries and a recent government study . However, the argument suffers from a number of flaws and needs to answer a number of questions before the recommendation made is considered sound.
Firstly, there is the question of whether the reduced on-job accidents at the nearby Panoply Industries is because of shorter work shifts. It may be that there is wrong attribution of...
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