The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing."Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of

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The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.

"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. This demand and the overall increase in clothing prices will make Sartorian's alpaca overcoats more profitable than ever before."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author, vice president of Sartorian's, a men's clothing manufacturing comapany, of the argument recommends that the company should restart the production of apaca overcoat (AO) whose production was stopped five years ago owing to the lack of reliable supplier of high quality wool fabric. To corroborate his argument, the author has cited the pieces of evidence that the company has a new fabric supplier as well as the increasing trend of clothing price. Although the conclusion is seemingly plausible, however, it is flawed with some unwarranted assumptions.

To begin, the author of the agrument assumes that the changes that can happen in a five years period is negligible and the things are as same they were as five years ago. However, this is not necessarily be true. For instance, the author cites an evidence that the AO had an customers' outcry five years ago, but there is reliability the demand is same as it was when the production was discontinued. Moreover, the president also includes that there was no competitor of the AO five years ago, however, after five years, there may be some other companies who also produce the AO. Therefore, unless providing the pieces of evidence to substantiate the assumption, the argument is vulnerable to criticism.

Aonther unstated assumption that the author makes is that the new supplier of wool fabric is reliable and it will supply high quality wool. But, there is no authentic information about whether the supplier is reliable and capable enough to supply the wool that Sartorian's requires. Perhaps the supplier can supply low quality wool so that the quality of the new produced AO can not be up to the level that the company as well as its customers requires. So, it is necessary to cite the evidence of reliability of the new supplier to strengthen the recommendation.

Thirdly, the author is dependent on the perception that there is a correlation between the upward trend of clothing prices as well as the recontinution of the production AO. However, to buttress the assumption there is additional evidence. Admittedly, the increasing price of clothing inspires the Sartorian's to produce AO, but, there is no authentic information about whether the price of AO, the price of all but a newly launch product, will also follow the same trend. Thus, in the absence of the proper evidence, the recommendation amounts a poor influence to resume the production of AO.

To sum up, the conclusion of the argument is flawed with a list number of unwarranted assumptions which are already discussed. To bolster the argument, the author needs to cite more authentic information to clarify the unstated assumptions. Otherwise, the argument will remain susceptible to debate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 288, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...t the company has a new fabric supplier as well as the increasing trend of clothin...
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Line 4, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... five years period is negligible and the things are as same they were as five yea...
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Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...uthor cites an evidence that the AO had an customers outcry five years ago, but th...
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Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...or cites an evidence that the AO had an customers outcry five years ago, but there is rel...
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Line 9, column 416, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('newly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('launch') instead of another adjective.
...r the price of AO, the price of all but a newly launch product, will also follow the same tren...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, for instance, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 16.3942115768 195% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2295.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 449.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11135857461 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92386480058 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429844097996 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.880141701 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.789473684 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6315789474 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200040724366 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595064758552 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703323579323 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863209256747 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685635919703 0.0628817314937 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2229 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.964 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.857 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.798 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5