The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses Last year however all of the five

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The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the above memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores, it is stated that the best way to reduces expences and and improve the profits in the company is to discountinue stocking the variety of imported cheese. This conclusion is based on the assumptions that the five best selling cheese of the last years cheese is domestic and a survey that has concluded for more preference for domestic cheese. In my opinion, the argument lacks many logical flaws.

Firstly, does the last years trend always true near future.? Is there any gaurantee that people only prefer domestic cheese near future.? There is no fixed answer for this. For example, the famous ticktoker trending right now might not be in trend next month. The loved superstar today might not loved next years. This means people choice are changing. That is why, the choice of the people towards cheese might also change with the time. If this hold true, the above argument doesn't hold water.

Secondly, Was the survey hold hundred pecent accuracy.? The auther haven't mention any data about the survey. The number of people and place where the survey has done, are completely not mention in the passage. What if the survey has done among the people who eat cheese once a year.? This ways of thinking makes the authors conclusion weak.

Futhermore, What if the scarcity of the imported cheese might rise the demand of that cheese. There is possiblility of high rise in demand of the imported cheese after removing the stock of these cheese as we know that scarcity rises the demand of any materials. And if this true, the stores will not be able to provide and meet the instant demands of imported cheese. This will make the store rather loss in their bussiness. Perhaps, the authors might also have to think about the future rather than focusing on the present unusal trends.

To sum up, the arguments as stands now is dubious as the author fails and lacks many logicals flaws with data and research. If the author have mention the data of people mention in the survey and the methodology of survey as well as give the answers of above asked questions , then it is possible to analyse the authors conclusion.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74736842105 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23890206794 2.78398813304 80% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489473684211 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.1904683879 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.4347826087 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5217391304 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220892117728 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554714798896 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066664056697 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120763916005 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107914537551 0.0628817314937 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.3799401198 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 17 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 1746 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.571 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.147 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.609 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.513 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.522 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.494 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5